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Discussion in 'Associated Content & Writing Articles' started by YoutubeMarketing, Jul 23, 2012.

  1. YoutubeMarketing

    YoutubeMarketing Registered Member

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    I would like to know what I could do to improve my article writing. I am planning to sell my services.
    http://pastebin.com/FYLLU7Hc
    Article writing is something I would like to do in any of my spare time for extra money. I currently do not have a job and I am not writing articles for anyone. If you would like me to email you some samples please pm me.
    Thanks in advance.
     
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  2. maverick469

    maverick469 Newbie

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    I read the first two paragraphs. Are you Indian?? from your way of writing I would say you are.. What I would suggest is to "Americanize" your English. In other words, speak in a more American fashion.. and write how you speak. Apart from that, I don't see any problems.
     
  3. peerless2acme

    peerless2acme BANNED BANNED

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    The real problem of OP is that he is not a proficient writer and well-versed with the basic rules of content writing. There are many sentence structure flaws in this article and this clearly indicates that English is not his primary language.
    @OP I would suggest you to regularly go through some of the best websites and look for high quality articles. As Francis Bacon said ' Reading makes a full man, Conference a ready man, and Writing makes a perfect man. Going by this quote, we need to devote a huge chunk of our time on writing. Hope this helps. Cheers.
     
  4. nipunn12

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    You should practice by writing articles and making videos on topics you know everything about. Then try making articles for niche sites
     
  5. new_dude

    new_dude Newbie

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    Loose this symbol "!"
     
  6. Girardot

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    Not near as many explanation points. It just makes me feel uneasy reading it in that tone. Only use it sparingly.

    Do not write in first person. Write in second or third, depending on what who is hiring you prefers.

    Others have already noted that English does not seem to be your first language, so with that being said, either familiarize yourself with more of the grammar rules, or see if you can find someone that's willing to proofread and edit it into a more "American" tone. Not even just regarding tone, but just the grammar as well.

    Capitalize the titles you use when it comes to a different paragraph topic.

    This is just a personal thing of mine, but unless a number is 21 or over, write it out. If the number is two words written out, keep it a number, but if it's just one, it looks nicer to write it. e.g. 10 to 20 looks nicer as: ten to twenty and doesn't take away from the aesthetic appeal of all words when there's no need to have numbers.

    You've got it all down, though, and you can do it if you put your mind to it. So, good luck on everything. If you ever want any extra advice, feel free to PM me and I'll do my best to help out. I don't mean any offense by anything I've said, by the way, and most of it is personal opinion, so don't take me too harsh. Good luck!
     
  7. SnowWar

    SnowWar Power Member

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    Pure student :p
    What you can do is very much simple.
    Just keep building your skills more powerful in your field.
    Try to practice regularly.
     
  8. poweronics

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    Better check out your work at grammarly for mistakes to improve the content.
     
  9. peerless2acme

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    I believe, he needs to go through English grammar all over again. The reason I say this is because of the fact of that he has been committing some basic mistakes which, unfortunately, any software won't explain.