Need Advice/Opinions

I'm new to CPA, and made a youtube video for my cpa.
I'm asking you to take a look at it and tell me If it will work or what I did wrong

youtube/watch?v=yqsX7PgtGr8

I'm not going to comment on the method because I've never done any CPA before.
However, if I was a guy that was sent to that page, I won't be sold. I think your design could be more convincing and enticing.

P/S: Sometimes, it just makes me cringe that people would still fall for this. *sigh*. Well, good monies for ya'll.