Instagram & Email Marketing

[Semirxbih]

Hi all,

As a college student, I have started a semi advertising and marketing agency but it is strictly Instagram based for now. I have a total of 23,000+ local St. Louis followers (instagram.com/etc) and it is increasing rapidly every day. The way that my page works is, that people will visit my website and purchase either a 'Basic, Plus or Premium' package and prices will vary depending on that and then I would promote their events to my local followers.

Here's the plan, I visit Facebook Events/Eventbrite and pick out future candidates that I think would be interested and I email them to see if they would like a promotional post. This method has worked for me until now, but I wanted to see if there is anything else that I am doing wrong with my email template. I use an email tracking assistant to view who opens the emails, and I have seen lots of people ignore emails.

So my question is, is there any way that I can improve the template posted below? All help would be appreciated.

Dear Marketing/Event members,

St. Louis Events is a social media promotion event start-up that specializes in expanding attendance to business/organizational events. We are a full-service events media and creative company, specializing in event marketing through our Instagram platform. Our agency is responsible for advertising the most viral, captivating and exciting events for business’ in the St. Louis metro area. We see that there is an event called 'Event' planned for 'Date' which we would love to help you promote. By using social media to increase engagement with event organizations, we have helped tons of happy clients throughout the region.

By enthralling our followers with an exciting event as they scroll down their feeds, we generate an estimated 60% boost in engagement. We have partnered with over 100 businesses across the region and have received outstanding feedback from satisfied clients. We invite you to visit our Instagram profile to see firsthand the work we provide for our clients!

Saint Louis Events Statistics:

• Top St. Louis Instagram Based Promotional Events Company.
• 21,000+ Local Instagram Followers / 1500+ Story impressions per day.

Our followers are primarily residents of the St. Louis & greater St. Louis area which enables the outstanding local engagement for events.

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By providing business' a quick and inexpensive way to advertise events in the area, we have opened up opportunities for event hosters to increase exposure. Our goal is to bring the best customer satisfaction to all our clients and help boost attendance as much as possible. What sets us apart? Client commitment and competitive pricing. Below, we will give a breakdown of the different packages that we offer for advertising.

With packages that start as low as $50, please visit our (website (Linked)) to view all of our offerings.

We hope that these packages give your business a plethora of choices on which advertising package would be most suitable for your events. We look forward to working with you to grow your business’ events. Please reach out to us anytime at @gmail.com for further questions/details.

 

[Deleted member 657006]

The best thing you can do is get the whole lot re written .

there many writers on the misc.

can you edit your post and hide your ig account info and email info please...

not everybody nice, just a hint.

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[dankgreentea]

I do a lot of copywriting work and I can tell you right now I know why your emails are getting ignored...

Your emails look like a typical sales spam message they see everyday.

Engage them like you're a real person. Stop coming at this from a analytical view. That can be done in a followup email if they are interested.

Talk to them as if you're a real person with something useful for them for example:

"Hey XXX, I saw you have an event coming up and I own an instagram page focused on the st. louis area with over 21,000 followers. I work with a lot of local events and promote them through my instagram profile. I was wondering if you would be interested in getting some great social media exposure for your event? If you're interested just let me know and I'll send you a follow up email with more details."

That's a quick example, but that should give you a general idea. Try to look like a real person, not a salesman.

Oh and your email subject headline is very important, but we don't know what it is so can't give you advice there.

 

[Daddykins]

I do a lot of copywriting work and I can tell you right now I know why your emails are getting ignored...

Your emails look like a typical sales spam message they see everyday.

Engage them like you're a real person. Stop coming at this from a analytical view. That can be done in a followup email if they are interested.

Talk to them as if you're a real person with something useful for them for example:

"Hey XXX, I saw you have an event coming up and I own an instagram page focused on the st. louis area with over 21,000 followers. I work with a lot of local events and promote them through my instagram profile. I was wondering if you would be interested in getting some great social media exposure for your event? If you're interested just let me know and I'll send you a follow up email with more details."

That's a quick example, but that should give you a general idea. Try to look like a real person, not a salesman.

Oh and your email subject headline is very important, but we don't know what it is so can't give you advice there.

Pretty much this. I literally read like one line of your email and got disinterested. Make it short and interesting. Never try to come off as a sales email.