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Which Headline Should I Use?

Discussion in 'Copywriting & Sales Persuasion' started by Malakh, Jan 7, 2019.

  1. Malakh

    Malakh Newbie

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    I am promoting a product that aims to cure social anxiety and shyness. And the negative effects it causes in a person's life. My target audience are people who are suffering from these hardships and I created 10 headlines to be used for my client's E-mail list campaign, but I'm not sure which one should I use.

    I am hoping you guys could give me feedback regarding which one feels like it has more impact, grabs attention better and communicates more clearly.

    Here they are.

    1. Cure Your Social Anxiety With This Simple Trick.
    2. Here’s How To Cure Your Social Anxiety.
    3. Are You Overly Shy? Put An End to Your Social Anxiety Once And For All.
    4. A Cure for Your Shyness.
    5. 3 Simple Steps to Overcome Shyness.
    6. Here’s How To Easily Get Rid Of Social Anxiety And Shyness.
    7. Is Your Shyness Keeping You From Living A Happy Life? Here’s How You Can Fix It.
    8. Is Your Social Anxiety Ruining Your Life? Here’s How You Can Get Rid Of It.
    9. A Life-Changing Cure To Finally Fix Your Social Anxiety And Shyness. Here’s How.
    10. Here’s How I Cured Myself Of Social Anxiety And Shyness.

    These are just headlines that I have in mind. If you also have suggestions then please do tell.

    Since I'm also willing to learn. :)
     
  2. hasan7707

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    Being a person who has suffered severe social anxiety in the past, I can say that the 1-9 sound pretty generic. I wouldn't read them.

    Go with 10: Here's How I FINALLY Eliminated My Social Anxiety And Shyness. I would read this.
     
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  3. Malakh

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    Thanks for your feedback bro.
     
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    I would select the best three, send them out to a small percentage of the list. Then select the one which gives the best response and send it to the whole list.

    My headline - Social Anxiety? Here's a SIMPLE cure that'll eliminate it forever
    Tweak this headline to your product. It can be simple cure or amazing cure or something else depending on what the cure is.

    Also, social anxiety is a bigger problem than shyness. I would only stick to social anxiety.
     
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  5. 50cent

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    3. It links shyness and social anxiety together. Not everyone who is shy will necessarily understand it is social anxiety.
     
  6. Tim Andrews

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    Try using a dimensionalized benefit in the headline. One where they can visualize not being shy or having this social anxiety. "You know that feeling you get when they're all looking at you? I fix that."
     
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    10). Here’s How I Cured Myself Of Social Anxiety And Shyness.

     
  8. Salman Saleem

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    Go with this one
    Here’s How I Cured Myself Of Social Anxiety And Shyness