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What do you think about this content? Native enough?

Discussion in 'Copywriting & Sales Persuasion' started by burukutuk, Jan 17, 2016.

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  1. burukutuk

    burukutuk Registered Member

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    What do you think about this content? Native enough? Just do selection of content writer, myself not native, so I can't check it properly.

    Water Damage Atlanta, Services for Reparation and Restoration

    Water damage Atlanta services will help you when disasters come and attack your home. People who are living in Atlanta may experience fatalities when they do not immediately call the services to fix the water damage.

    Severe damages can be the risk of water damage and you cannot rely on yourself to get everything back to normal, you need professionals for the reparation. If you have no skills related to the water damage, you won't be able to notice any damaged spot, but experts can immediately get what part is wrong and the damages can be inspected as soon as possible. When you have them, you will be alerted and guided well about the problems that might appear in the future caused by floods.

    The things required the most by water damage services in Atlanta are molds' detection, water's marks on the dry walls, and strange smells that are included in telltale signals and then they need to note them all. If you force yourself to get the repair done alone, there might some problems that are more serious in the future, so it is always better to have the professional services to do the task for you as the water damage services Atlanta have experts that can handle the damage.

    With the help of water damage services in Atlanta, there are hidden damages that can be detected even though you cannot notice them. After the fault lines are spotted, they will make the decisions what they need to do. After the disasters, you need to clean everything up and there may be some things that you need to replace, let these be the professionals Atlanta's job because the more proper equipment are owned by them so the job must be done in a correct way as well.

    It is always wise to start with researching and reviewing the best water damage services Atlanta companies that have credibility and good reputation so your valuable money and time can be saved.
     
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  2. The Nix

    The Nix Power Member

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    Boring and generic article, but English *looks* native. Although sentences are too long.
     
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  3. burukutuk

    burukutuk Registered Member

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    Thanks for your opinion, anyone else?
     
  4. The Nix

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    Also... Make sure you split that article up into nice little paragraphs. Would make for a much better read.
     
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  5. burukutuk

    burukutuk Registered Member

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    Okay, noted. Thanks for your suggestion sir.
     
  6. rabbitking

    rabbitking Elite Member

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    My opinion is to press the enter key a couple of times so we can read it. Blocks of text aren't your friend.
     
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  7. burukutuk

    burukutuk Registered Member

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    Your suggestion is a piece of diamond for me. Thanks for your suggestion, anyone else?
     
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    Split it into paragraphs so that we can judge the quality.
     
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    "If you have no skills related to the water damage" that I would change something else, perhaps "If you notice any water damage you should call a local contractor in your area" or something similar.

    I read the whole article other than that make sure to have some paragraphs, makes it easier to read.
     
  10. burukutuk

    burukutuk Registered Member

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    I already split the paragraphs just yet sir. Will be happy to hear your opinion.
     
  11. burukutuk

    burukutuk Registered Member

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    Okay sir, well noted. Thanks for the suggestion.
     
  12. smeare

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    I actually work in this field. You should use the word "mitigation" which means to stop the water damage from causing more water damage. "Reparation" doesn't really fit in this field at all. Plus "fatalities" are unlikely due to water damages in a home. Focus more on mold issues and health concerns rather than "fatalities". Also mix in the key word of "water mitigation". It does not sound very native at all.

    Hope that helps
     
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  13. burukutuk

    burukutuk Registered Member

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    Okay, I got your point. I think I must find another writer.
     
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    This means the writer isn't doing their research properly, but if you pay them peanuts...

    Also, it's dull as fuck.
     
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    Water Damage Services in Atlanta. Repair and Restoration.

    When your home suffers water damage, it can be tough to get back on your feet. Water Damage Atlanta can help you carry out the necessary repairs and get you and your family back on track.

    Often, the severe damage caused by water ingress cannot be seen - particularly to the untrained eye! If you don't have experience in dealing with the aftermath of water flooding it makes sense to call in the professionals. We can guide you through the repair process and also alert you to any potential issues for the future.

    The main issues surrounding water ingress are mold and damp. Both spread throughout a home and leave water marks, musty odors and cause structural damage over time. If you live in the Atlanta area, one quick call to Atlanta Water Damage Services is a no-brainer, your household and family deserve the best!

    When you call in our professional services, you can be sure we'll use the correct tools, processes and help you make the decisions necessary to keep your property safe. As professionals we guarantee to fit any repaired or replaced items properly and ensure your home is put back exactly as it was - that's the Atlanta Water Damage Service way!


    [FTFY]

    He's probably paying something crazy like $2.00 per 500 words. It certainly looks like an Indian / Bangladeshi ESOL writers work.
     
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  16. Fairusd

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    Looks like it needs quite a bit of fixing. Not good enough in my standards imo.
     
  17. Jesse Custer

    Jesse Custer Regular Member

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    Not native.

    "After the disasters, you need to clean everything up and there may be some things that you need to replace, let these be the professionals Atlanta's job because the more proper equipment are owned by them so the job must be done in a correct way as well. "

    As said above, the sentences are way too long.

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    let these be the professionals Atlanta's job "

    That's snippet should be "let this be..." as "job" used in that context is uncountable. However, there's so much wrong with that sentence I'd bin it all.....better than most spun copy I suppose...
     
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    It's absolute garbage. I hope you're not using it on your money site. I wouldn't even use it on a PBN.

    Use cheap $1/100 words content for Tier 2 and 3 stuff.

    Use cheap $3/100 words content for link building.

    Use $5-$10/100 words content for your money site.

    If people are buying from you, your content needs to be good. If I was a prospective customer and I read that article, I would shake my head and click away from your site. It totally destroys your credibility. I can't understand why people here are willing to spend so much on links to get their site ranking, then only willing to spend pennies on content. Good content can triple or quadruple your conversion rate and make you a lot more money.
     
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    Totally agree. Your article is dross and I switched off and started to yawn after the first sentence. The trick to success is to know your core strengths, and to delegate the other areas to skilled people.
     
  20. Bengr86

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    1) You get what you pay for
    2) You need to spend money to make money.

    The text above looks like you didn't follow both of those rules, and it shows. The money you spend on good writing is an investment in your future customers, and a $50 investment in copy now can lead to hundreds, if not thousands of dollars of income in the future.
     
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