That looks so much more pro then the original - good job! Of course though there are a few things I would change

... Including but not limited to: The keyword should be bold in the header and the subtitle to focus the user on the expected outcome. The product box version should not be an even number but for example 1.21 or 2.45 which sounds less made up (Walmart does this) and also unwittingly promotes the products experience in the market. I am not sure but is that Lorem Ipsum data at the bottom of the box? If so scratch that and add some testimonial or alike continent. Now speaking of testimonials ... they should really be beefed up 1 liners don't sell sh*t. Finally as davie9x mentioned above you should really add copyright info in the footer of the page.
I was bored so I also marked up a screen shot of the site with some horrifically almost illegible mouse written notes.
Good luck and keep us updated.
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