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Revamped Sales Page - Opinions Please

Discussion in 'Clickbank' started by shayman, Oct 28, 2010.

  1. shayman

    shayman Registered Member

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    Hey all
    As the subject implies I've just today finished making some big changes to my Clickbank product sales page for A.S.A.Piano. Although I've made some modest sales in the last 3 or so months I'm convinced that my product has real value and should be selling way better. I've had only positive feedback from customers who have bought it, so I decided that the lack of sales was due to the sales letter.

    I've re-worded most of the headlines plus I had an opt-in form actually on the page giving away a free video tutorial which I've now removed and made an 'exit' opt-in instead. I changed this firstly because I was getting plenty of takers on this, however I got the impression that visitors were happy with just getting that, and then no too bothered about committing to an actual sale! It kind of gave them a soft option.

    Secondly, I removed the opt-in because I also feel that affiliates may be put off. I have to say that I would never attempt to take money out of my affiliates pockets..but I can see the potential to do so and why it might put affiliates off, but it just wouldn't make any sense to me as affiliates are the key the my success I believe.

    Anyhow, please take a look and I'd appreciate any positive/negative feedback.
    Many thanks

    www.asapiano.com
     
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  2. thetraveller

    thetraveller Senior Member

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    Seems nice to me, nice and simple, rounded corners, good sale letter. I think you've misspelled one word here "we always pay royalties under licence" I think is license instead of licence. Good luck.
     
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  3. shayman

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    Hey all..I won't say thank you to every post but just know that any comments are much appreciated :)

    I'm toying with changing the headline to this:

    In Just Two Hours From Now You Could Be Playing One Of These Twelve Classic Songs on Piano By Ear, Even If You Are a Complete Beginner:

    Do you think that this will help draw people in rather than a 7 week schedule for the full course?
     
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    I think you should write a more realistic time. Did you tried the course ? In how much time can you learn to play by ear ? For me looks more realistic a longer time because I expect that such a thing takes time to learn (even a single song), and I am willing to invest that time. What you put in is what you get. I prefer the actual title, but is better that you hear more opinions on this.
     
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    Sorry, double post.
     
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  6. shayman

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    Well, I'd say that in two hours someone could be playing one of the songs yes. Don't get me wrong..they won't be Elton John in two hours, but they could certainly have the basics yes. The videos are very simple to follow and Samantha is a professional teacher plus there is the forum for them to ask questions if they need little advice.

    I'm just wondering whether focusing the headline on the shorter term would encourage people more or would they prefer to feel like it was a term thing?
     
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    should put up a virtual chat agent pop up and offer people a discount on exit or bonus or the site.. will increase sales amazingly..
     
  8. shayman

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    Sounds interesting?? Can you recommend one please?
     
  9. muscleteen

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    Maybe it's just me, but I'd change the headlines fonts from "Impact" to "Verdana" (bold).

    Also, I would re-vamp the ebook cover too, to make it more "Web 2.0" type.

    That's just my constructive 2 cents :)

    Also if you need your salespage even more revamped, let me know :)
     
  10. shayman

    shayman Registered Member

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    OMG..I had it as Verdana on my very first layout and it was suggested changing it to Impact! Can't win sometimes can you!! I'm open to any suggestions though and the great thing about a web page is that nothing is set in stone...I'll see how things go but can easily test using Verdana too:)
     
  11. Deusdies

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    Nice site and a good sales copy. I may actually purchase your product, I'm learning to play piano now :D
     
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  12. shayman

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    Would be a pleasure to help you learn Piano Deusdies..have PM'd you :)
    Shayman