I would change the first part of your site to something that solves the problem. In the opening, try this: Who else wants an easy hands-off solution to making money on the internet?
THAT should be the "hook" or the first part of the AIDA: Attention, Interest, Desire, Action.
Then, follow up with how you can provide the solution. Which you have to a point, but you kind of reversed it.
No matter what some may say, the formula for sales copy stays pretty much the same.
Watch the countless (very expensive) ads on tv. They work. If they did not, the companies could not afford to spend the money on them.
Interesting idea, but you need to change your copy on the main page. You have the right idea, but I would put some of the bullet points at the beginning of the copy.
Like this flow: Here is your problem---->Here is our solution to your problem------>Here are our features and benefits of our solution to your problem------>and so on......
Make your sales page pretty much like the others that convert really well. I would look at some of the top sellers (the big dogs) and see how their copy is written.
Copy their copy. Change it to meet your needs.
Something to consider..........whoever writes articles for that many sites will have to be quick. AND, someone will must edit them.
I am editing articles right now for my membership site and it takes a LOT of time.
Some things to consider. I hope that I have been helpful.
