Headlines! Which is Better?

GringoMonkey said:

Fair enough as to your headlines.

You need to split it into a headline that grabs the attention and then a sub headline that expands on it providing more infornation.

As you specifically only want me to comment on the headline, an example would be truncate headline 2 to grab attention, so:

"Discover How I Lowered the High Blood Pressure of my Husband"

But a nicer way would be:

"Discover How I Lowered My Husbands High Blood Pressure"

Then write a sub headline expanding on that.

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Geasy said:

Make sure to fix your margins. Your right side is wider than the left, if you haven't noticed. At least that's what it shows on my screen.

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jamesdarby108 said:

Don't know if someone has already mentioned it but the text overlaps on some of your photos/videos.

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planck said:

Use full screen on your PC and you won't have the problem.

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planck said:

It is not just on your screen. It is universal. Thanks for your input but I don’t see how unequal margins will impact visitor retention… which is the whole point of a captivating headline.

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Geasy said:

It will impact the conversion rate. Your site looks unprofessional and I doubtedly would buy from a site alike.

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jamesdarby108 said:

It's an issue on mobile

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planck said:

That's how business works.
Some buy. Others don't. It's called business.


I know.
About half of my sales for different products on this same site comes from mobile.

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