Headlines! Which is Better?

[planck]

Fair enough as to your headlines.

You need to split it into a headline that grabs the attention and then a sub headline that expands on it providing more infornation.

As you specifically only want me to comment on the headline, an example would be truncate headline 2 to grab attention, so:

"Discover How I Lowered the High Blood Pressure of my Husband"

But a nicer way would be:

"Discover How I Lowered My Husbands High Blood Pressure"

Then write a sub headline expanding on that.

You see!

You can be a constructive contributor, when you want to. Thanks for the suggestion.

Make sure to fix your margins. Your right side is wider than the left, if you haven't noticed. At least that's what it shows on my screen.

It is not just on your screen. It is universal. Thanks for your input but I don’t see how unequal margins will impact visitor retention… which is the whole point of a captivating headline.

 

[GringoMonkey]

Your domain and headline go hand in hand...

People read: domain name -> headline -> sub headline

 

[Jammy0308]

Don't know if someone has already mentioned it but the text overlaps on some of your photos/videos.

 

[planck]

Don't know if someone has already mentioned it but the text overlaps on some of your photos/videos.

Use full screen on your PC and you won't have the problem.

 

[Jammy0308]

Use full screen on your PC and you won't have the problem.

It's an issue on mobile

 

[Geasy]

It is not just on your screen. It is universal. Thanks for your input but I don’t see how unequal margins will impact visitor retention… which is the whole point of a captivating headline.

It will impact the conversion rate. Your site looks unprofessional and I doubtedly would buy from a site alike.

 

[planck]

It will impact the conversion rate. Your site looks unprofessional and I doubtedly would buy from a site alike.

That's how business works.
Some buy. Others don't. It's called business.

It's an issue on mobile

I know.
About half of my sales for different products on this same site comes from mobile.

 

[Jammy0308]

That's how business works.
Some buy. Others don't. It's called business.


I know.
About half of my sales for different products on this same site comes from mobile.

Would still be a good improvement IMO, but of course it's up to you

 

[LinksForPros]

First one is better but can be improved.

 

[Perfect Nightmare]

Nice but old way to get the traffic. You could create a poll with both headlines.

 

[hatfromthewilds]

she placed this link to get link juice from blackhatworld

 

[WhaTheFak]

Both looks pretty bad tbh.