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Critique my Landing page

Discussion in 'Web Design' started by NufcOnline, Apr 11, 2013.

  1. NufcOnline

    NufcOnline Newbie

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    http://habitzone.net/

    What needs improving?

    Thanks Joe
     
  2. Ptrick125

    Ptrick125 Regular Member

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    I would add more pictures, and a more lively background. I think it would also help to have a navigation bar.
     
  3. 8sideways

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    I agree with Ptrick125. Also to make your header image sit better with everything else use a black to white gradient on each side so that its not just a hard solid black box.
     
  4. Simas9

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    Write 'Enter your email below and get a plan that is worth $97 instantly for free' or something similar above the opt-in field.

    I would also change the black to blue/dark blue and cut half of the banner.

    What's with the bodybuilder pic? Is this for bodybuilding achievements only? Ditch the bodybuilder guy if not.

    Taking action - scaaary words for most of the people. Build Habits That Transform YOU and YOUR Life EASILY. would be much better for a headline.

    I would make the arrows, text near them orange and add a one big arrow below the text point to the email field.

    Don't forget that people are a bunch of lazy fat bastards that dream about shortcuts and magic pills. Use words like 'after putting it to work', 'Imagine', 'Easy', 'In control' and 'Because'.

    Good luck!
     
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  5. ID Internet Marketer

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    same here with Simas9. also, you need to add more pictures and change black color.
     
  6. Furious George

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    It's super boring.

    (this is the first thing my eyes were drawn to) "Build Habits That Transform YOU and YOUR Life." the line spacing is weird, the font is rather bland. The red letters are a poor choice. I would go with a darker background and lighter letters.

    Your copy is very undesirable, from a reading standpoint. I'm not critiquing the content, just the placement, font and color.

    I like the header, although, it's not very balanced. I would make habitzone.net thicker and stand out more, then move Taking Action somewhere... it's like there's a big empty unused space.

    It's weird that the header is black, and the rest of the page is white... I think the rest of the page should be black also.

    To critique the copy... it has incomplete sentences; it's written poorly, and after I read it I want to do anything other than sign up.


    It needs work.
     
  7. SEOtime

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    Add some more images. Looks a bit too dull for me. Other than than it would be great.
     
  8. Smurgi

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    Add some images and a little bit text... more content the site is a little empty i think...
     
  9. premiumdesigns

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    Add some images and a nice background and also make the page load a bit faster, it is loading too slow at present.