He didnt like my email :(

[Toolboy]

So I sent an offer to some hotels off a random list, but this one guy was not very grateful for my offer of help.

Just thought I would share as its a pretty funny response.

His website is some kind of gay retreat where guys can walk around naked.

What on God's Earth Planet are you from???​

Your e mail below is DREADFUL..​

LONG WINDED - BLAH BLAH BLAH and for busy hoteliers like me, it is just babble babble babble .​

I got sick of reading it after just the first 2 paragraphs and realised it was spam and I DO NOT APPRECIATE YOU SPAMMING MY ADDRESS ​

Your advertising trechnique is DREADFUL yet you think you can assist hotels - GET REAL...​

YOU HAVE A LOT TO LEARN ​

DO NOT SPAM ME WITH THIS GARBAGE AGAIN. ​

PLUS - WHAT SORT OF MORON SENDS AN E MAIL SUCH AS YOURS TO A VENUE WITH A WEB SITE THAT RECEIVED OVER 1 MILLION HITS LAST YEAR - MORE THAN ANY OF YOURS I AM SURE.​

NOW = BOG OFF.
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[zmoney]

Sign his butt up for some enhancement emails

 

[soyafan]

May be he is already paying lot of $$$ to some other IMer to take care of his site.Anyways it is a numbers game.You ask hundred people and some reply in affirmative.

As long as they don't complain for spamming you shouldn't worry about one or two angry rant emails

 

[oxonbeef]

Take note of what he said he's giving you some advice.

Your e mail below is DREADFUL..
LONG WINDED - BLAH BLAH BLAH and for busy hoteliers like me, it is just babble babble babble

I would love to see your email.

 

[Toolboy]

Yeah for sure I have taken it on board, its the first send so I fully intend on trying another completely different copy and seeing how that one goes.

Oxon I would love to pm you the email if you will give me a few pointers and promise not to make a thread about how bad I am at writing emails

 

[Abstroose]

Take note of what he said he's giving you some advice.

I would love to see your email.

Exactly what I thought.

Perhaps you should post your email here so we can review it.

 

[Maruk]

Well, I don't think you are very grateful to his help to you.
He clearly states that your offer looks spammy.
And if your email is 2 pages long I can't disagree. Those are the first I delete without even reading them.

EDIT:
What the dudes above me said

 

[Toolboy]

haha i could be more grateful you are right
it was a very long email, i used this 12 step sales letter formula that i found, i guess the downside is it creates long letters.

But this is all about trying different letters and see what gets the best response? - I wont know for a while yet, this could prove to be more effective than a short sharp letter