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Discussion in 'White Hat SEO' started by Bertik, Oct 29, 2010.

  1. Bertik

    Bertik Newbie

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    Hi,

    I would like to ask you if you guys could do me a favor and read an article and tell me if it makes sense to you. If it's well written. Please.
    Especially native English speakers.

    I am not a native English speaker myself and it is hard for me to judge its quality.

    Thank you in advance to all of you!

    Article is here:
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    http://bit.ly/baR5nu
     
  2. adstractor

    adstractor Regular Member

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    If you used a free Article creator like SPINBLITZ.COM you would not need to get the language checked ...:)
     
  3. BorisTipsIt

    BorisTipsIt Regular Member

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    Definitely not written by a native English speaker. Starts out okay, but ends up with bad grammar and repetitive word usage. Examples:

    "Nobel Biocare products are reputable and are not a replicated products which other cheaper brands tend to produce."

    "are not a replicated products" makes no sense.

    "The products available under Nobel Biocare is practically endless."

    "is" should be "are".

    Wouldn't buy it myself, but not a complete disaster. Just my two cents.
     
  4. Bertik

    Bertik Newbie

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    Thanks Boris,

    I am paying $19 for this and before I do order in bulk (as I finally will) I need to make sure it is worth the money.

    Thanks again :)

     
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  5. Bertik

    Bertik Newbie

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    Joke, isn't it?

     
  6. Say_Uncle

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    Agree, while mostly understandable, the article does not flow, syntax feels stilted and it needs to be re-written.

    SU
     
  7. KaisGuy

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    Hi Mate,

    I had a look at the article and in my opinion it reads well. Good job!

    There is one thing towards the end though I picked up.

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    The products available under Nobel Biocare is practically endless.
    Should be

    Code:
    The products available under Nobel Biocare are practically endless.
    Hope this helps!

    Ruoall
     
  8. Bertik

    Bertik Newbie

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    Yes, it helps!
    Thank you Ruoall.

     
  9. cbnoob

    cbnoob Senior Member

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    First of all, get a grammar book and start to learn it man, it's tedious but it will help you very much in the long run. (go to gigapedia dot com)
    Second, grab ms office 2010, write on it first and it will help you correct a lot of grammar mistakes. (search it on torrentz dot com)
    it's my experience as a non native english speaker
     
  10. Bertik

    Bertik Newbie

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    It's not about grammar man...

    My question is about the flow of the words and readability.
    Like Say_Uncle is expressing his feelings about the article.

    Thanks
     
  11. Josh116

    Josh116 Registered Member

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    Generic article. I wouldn't have read past the first sentence if I wasn't doing it for you. You need a native English writer to produce a descriptive article with a flow.

    "Nobel Biocare has been producing the highest quality prosthetic dental implants in the dental industry for nearly 30 years."

    I'm pretty sure the only industry that dental implants are in is the dental industry. The use of repetitive phrases is tiring.

    Just my tuppence worth.
     
  12. CO-flow

    CO-flow Junior Member

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    I'll write an article better than that for $8 bucks. :D
     
  13. ADHD-Dude

    ADHD-Dude Power Member

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    Put the article in MS Word and it will detect the grammar mistakes
     
  14. suskito

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    The syntax does not feel natural at all. Are you paying $19 for this or did I read $1.9 (1 point nine dollars). Because if you are paying $19 for this, then I would say its a no no
     
  15. Charas

    Charas Registered Member

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    I would say you should get a lot better than this for $19
     
  16. adstractor

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    $19 for that is daylight robbery !
     
  17. BorisTipsIt

    BorisTipsIt Regular Member

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    OP,

    $19?! That is highway robbery. Look up Ramsweb on this forum. He does high
    quality articles for $4. $19 is a joke.

    R