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Discussion in 'Associated Content & Writing Articles' started by Nut-Nights, Nov 27, 2014.

  1. Nut-Nights

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    Here is article :- (Updated)

    The words come from the prologue to The Time Traveler's Wife, by Audrey Niffenegger. If you've seen the film or read the book, you might recognise them. They refer to the dislocation of time travel (yes, I realise the clue is in the title [​IMG] ) but there is something about the description of being there, and then not there... that captures some of the feeling of disconnect, of dislocation even, that we can get from social media presence, and absence, too.

    I'm just back from a short social media absence: I was on holiday in Ireland for 10 days, providing the chance (amongst many other wonderful things) to get stuck into some serious (and not so serious) reading.


    This summer's reading pile included The Time Traveler's Wife so I could join in a readalong being organised by Amy Palko. The first prompt for discussion is about ways in which we are all, on some level, time travellers, how we move backwards and forwards through time in our minds and hearts, revisiting old wounds (and triumphs), worrying about or fantasising over the future, rarely settled in the present moment.


    Too much time online can have a similar effect. Maybe we can't time travel (yet) but we can move easily across countries, continents, languages, and time zones. We can get lost in online conversations and lose track of time. We can switch on too often and too soon, and lose focus and attention on what's here, in front of you, in the real world, right here, right now.

    And yet being present in the online world matters too. There's advice aplenty on the importance of a social media presence for individuals, authors, bands, charities, businesses, writers and no doubt time travellers too.

    But what does it actually mean to be present online?


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    is a huge part of the way we spent our time online, but is reading enough to make you feel present? Mostly it leaves me feeling invisible, like I'm not really there, unless I also ‘do' something to signal I've read the post. A comment, a response, a sharing of the link on Twitter or Facebook...


    Oh, but that requires signalling that you are ‘there', and yet, perhaps you do not want to be seen to be there, as you're not really present, because you don't have time to be present (noticing, listening, responding, chatting, advising, engaging).

    If I am busy, I might post an update on Facebook to let people know I am ‘here' (where?), safe in the knowledge I don't need also to be there, in real time. It's just like pinning something up on a notice board. People can read it at their leisure if they want to - it's not a conversation starter, it's just a sign. My presence alongside it is not required.

    Whereas Twitter takes time, and it takes presence. You can't just jump in and jump out again. (Well of course you can, technically, and lots of people do, but it changes the nature and the feel of the interaction. It's what makes Twitter so powerful, and also so challenging, because it takes time and yes that thing again: presence.)


    I don't draft posts to go out when I'm away any more, because it doesn't feel right - they don't resonate in the same way (even if it's just to my ears). It doesn't feel right to invite you over when I'm not here - even though I'm not here anyway, most of the time, on the days when I do post and am therefore ‘here'.

    Confusing, isn't it?

    And of course these aren't the only disconnects.
     
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  2. Brad100

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    I don't know about ratings but you put your whole article here? I don't know much, but I don't think its good because Google can pick it up and even after deleting this thread, search engines would still have your article indexed and it would make your article useless. Thats just my thinking, not too sure about it though.
     
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    I dont need this article.
     
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    Is this some kind of translation from another language? You need to polish it. It is difficult to translate this type of article, so you will probably need to improvize more.
     
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    Is it article or poetry?
     
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    its not translation. But i think its need improvment.
     
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    Overuse of commas.
     
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    what about quality ?
     
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    A bit overly dramatic to my taste. Sometimes phrases like "You're just, at best, a writer" make an impression to the reader, but there is an over-flow of that dramatic style.

    Some grammar mistakes, so you just need to keep writing to make it better.
     
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    are you writing a book ?
    I don't want to be rude but this looks like those budding bloggers who keep penning there thoughts on their blogspots and wordpresses.
    also commas and line spacing made it difficult to read.
     
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    Just updated the op
     
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    This is not an update but a completely new article which is way better.
     
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    Its spun content. :)
     
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    I didn't see the original article, so can only comment on what's there now.

    I like it.

    I think it's both well written and reads well. I am assuming the comments about punctuation were based on whatever the 'original' was, because to me you've punctuated well - and in a way that makes it more readable.

    If I had read it blind (without the context of 'The Time Traveler's Wife') I could understand someone thinking it was an overly philosophical perspective on Social Media.

    But the context adds relevance and makes it more interesting.

    To me, the Time Traveler's Wife does make a philosophical point about how engaged we are with our lives and I can see how you are relating that to Social Media.

    I think you have elucidated your thoughts on that really well.

    For me, it's a solid article, interesting subject and well written.

    I'd like to have seen the original, because from the other comments it sounds like you have worked hard to improve it too.
     
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    so basically it can be used for web 2.0 ?
     
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    Provided it's original, of course.

    I just noticed your earlier comment that it's spun, but my understanding was that you wrote it yourself?

    If it's spun, it's your call on how original it is.
     
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    The words come from the prologue to The Time Traveler?s Wife, by Audrey Niffenegger. If you?ve seen the film or read the book, you might recognise them. They refer to the dislocation of time travel (yes, I realise the clue is in the title [​IMG] ) but there is something about the description of being there, and then not there? that captures some of the feeling of disconnect, of dislocation even, that we can get from social media presence, and absence, too.

    I?m just back from a short social media absence: I was on holiday in Ireland for 10 days, providing the chance (amongst many other wonderful things) to get stuck into some serious (and not so serious) reading.


    This summer?s reading pile included The Time Traveler?s Wife so I could join in a readalong being organised by Amy Palko. The first prompt for discussion is about ways in which we are all, on some level, time travellers, how we move backwards and forwards through time in our minds and hearts, revisiting old wounds (and triumphs), worrying about or fantasising over the future, rarely settled in the present moment.


    Too much time online can have a similar effect. Maybe we can?t time travel (yet) but we can move easily across countries, continents, languages, and time zones. We can get lost in online conversations and lose track of time. We can switch on too often and too soon, and lose focus and attention on what?s here, in front of you, in the real world, right here, right now.

    And yet being present in the online world matters too. There?s advice aplenty on the importance of a social media presence for individuals, authors, bands, charities, businesses, writers and no doubt time travellers too.

    But what does it actually mean to be present online?


    Reading is a huge part of the way we spent our time online, but is reading enough to make you feel present? Mostly it leaves me feeling invisible, like I?m not really there, unless I also ?do? something to signal I?ve read the post. A comment, a response, a sharing of the link on Twitter or Facebook?


    Oh, but that requires signalling that you are ?there?, and yet, perhaps you do not want to be seen to be there, as you?re not really present, because you don?t have time to be present (noticing, listening, responding, chatting, advising, engaging).

    If I am busy, I might post an update on Facebook to let people know I am ?here? (where?), safe in the knowledge I don?t need also to be there, in real time. It?s just like pinning something up on a notice board. People can read it at their leisure if they want to ? it?s not a conversation starter, it?s just a sign. My presence alongside it is not required.

    Whereas Twitter takes time, and it takes presence. You can?t just jump in and jump out again. (Well of course you can, technically, and lots of people do, but it changes the nature and the feel of the interaction. It?s what makes Twitter so powerful, and also so challenging, because it takes time and yes that thing again: presence.)


    I don?t draft posts to go out when I?m away any more, because it doesn?t feel right ? they don?t resonate in the same way (even if it?s just to my ears). It doesn?t feel right to invite you over when I?m not here ? even though I?m not here anyway, most of the time, on the days when I do post and am therefore ?here?.

    Confusing, isn?t it?

    And of course these aren?t the only disconnects.

    Edit: I just did a quick proofread, quite a bit of grammar and spelling problems.
     
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    No i am using BH method to generate content. Its 100% unique but not now as already posted here :) I didnt write it, my english sucks. I just hate buying content. :D