you should have a complete summery and call to action in 3 sentences.
The rest of the info you posted should be rewrote to be focused on an actual case study of jess.
I looked at the whole text, and i'm still not even sure what your selling. I want to see it in the first paragraph. After that my attention is gone anyway.
You need to split the text with a main features list (4 or 5 main points)
Something like this:
Thanks for visiting blah blah blah. Are you looking for a great way to boost your youtube videos? Do you need more hits and subscribers? Well we offer a brand new service that does this and more. Click here to view our our services, and to get the prices.
If your uploading videos to youtube blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah then small nudge to action.
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If you want this and more then blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah read jess's case study here blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah then small nudge to action.
So what are you waiting for? Click the order button and we can get started on your order today.
