Trying To Brush Up My Writing

johny.kingy said:

You show promise, so keep at it. For example, I'd write one of the sentences as Despite being full of confidence, their actions pave the road to failure.

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hasan7707 said:

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Are you fed up of pleasing and living for others? The truth is that life is too short to depress yourself because of others -- removing toxic people who only know to bring you down is very essential. As both of you are not to control each others life, stepping away from them is a really smart move. They harm your mental health and cognitive thinking, making you feel worthless and low on self-esteem.

Toxic people spread poison all over your life, isolate you from social life, treat you like personal property, suck out the last drop of positivity from you. Though always acting sure of it, their predictions turn out as wrong as possible. In order to deal with personal problems, they start judging and show no empathy to anyone. They only focus on own benefits because of the fact that they are very selfish. They can harm others for own good without any second thoughts.

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Sherbert Hoover said:

Hemingway is also a great and free tool. I run my articles through both before sending to clients. The above is WAY too wordy, but on the right track.

Here is my rewrite of your rewrite:

Are you fed up with pleasing others? Life's too short. Removing toxic people bringing you down is vital, and stepping away from negative situations is a good move. These such people can be harmful to mental health and cognition, making you feel useless and suppressing self-esteem.

The whole second paragraph is fluff.

Regardless, not bad for E3L.

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