Review requests for Landing Page

sadecentpoint said:

i have seen your landing page , being a copy writer my self i have seen many flaws.
1- too short landing page (this normally works with video + free optin)
2- Less use of trigger words
3- Graphics are not that catchy

over all it decreases the perceived value of your product , which is a very important factor to take care.

Try to get a professional writer + graphic design because you want to earn from the product for years , right?

good luck

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akerz said:

For UX optimisation, I'd suggest you to place a simple call-to-action button early on on the page (without having to scroll down).
For example, when the visitor lands on your page, he should read right away in the center of the landing page:
- what he is going to get (Product definition)
- why he should get it (USP)
- how he can get it (the CTA button)

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rjd1265 said:

I hate the red background. The very first thing i think of when i opened your page was "WARNING". It looks like when of those virus pages that pop up when you go on certain sites.

Headline should be something like "Stop Wasting Time and Money Trying To Learn Spanish"

If you want to keep your site short that is ok but then do a VSL (Video Sales Letter). A guy on here does them for like $200 and they are pretty good.

I myself dislike the long sales pages. I like doing a VSl with some content but you will have to test which works best in your niche.

Ryan

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twpro said:

Coming from a native English speaker- use a different word besides penetrate. No one likes to be told any part of their body is going to be penetrated.

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islandman1010 said:

You really need someone who is native English to write your sales letter. I would have no confidence that your product can teach me Spanish when the English is poor. It wouldn't cost much to correct it but at the moment it doesn't sound professional at all.

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tjoans said:

The headline is not powerful enough. Do a Google search for "Gary Halbert" and study his techniques.

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