Review my salespage?

Hey guys,

please review my salespage!

New design with testimonials:
Old design

1. You Need a proper Logo.
2. Some Grammatical Errors.
3. I think the site's width is to small, creating a cramped page. (Newer Version..)

Other then that the content is good.

P.S.

You dont need to put the hiderefer...

Thanks q3ick!

I think you new one is much better but your audio testimonials need some work. They sounded fake and you could tell everyone on them was from Asia or something. You should get a bunch on BHW members to do them for you. I would be willing to help you out with one, just PM me if your interested.

Thanks JCSr.

Actually those testimonials are "temporary" only. I recently post a thread on "Hire a Freelancer" section seeking people to do voice testimonials. The ones currently at my homepage is just a few of them.

I'm still waiting for the rest (Americans!)

AS q3ick says cramped. Also you haven't got headings in bold. The sales letter doesn't have fluidity to carry the eye or the reader to read the next heading or sub heading. To much work to read. Bullet points very important, your sales page is not a blog post. Graphics are not really that good -> meds.jpg what is that? Having said all that the page isn't bad but it won't maintain the punters interest, having got someone there to the page seems a waste to loose your audience ->Follow sales page formulas that abound on the internet and BHW.
Wishing you good luck BlackSeng in your journey.

Thanks downloadqz!

I will tweak it asap.