Review My Sales Letter

Let me know what you guys think, I have about 5 versions but I am being overly critical. So just tell me what you think.

I thought it was really good mate. I would maybe include a paragraph where you say something along the lines of "60% of small businesses are losing out on massive amounts of business because they don't have any online presence etc" because I know that in the UK this is true, STILL 60% of small businesses have no website. Will make the people who are really clueless about the internet think they can get a site and the floodgates will just open.

I'd also drop the old "This offer might expire at midnight!" lol, well maybe not that but something to promote a bit urgency in the business owner to get on to your site pronto or give you a phone.

i think it was great, but my question is how are you making $ if you only charging 42$ monthly

I thought it was good to, maybe needs something a deadline to your offer to add urgency. Also think that you're 42 bucks is way to little for what you're offering