Rate my Squeeze Page!

Hey everybody,

I don't really know where to post that thread, hope it's ok here.

So I am starting in E-Mail Marketing right now and created my first squeeze page. You can find it here: www.earn-money-online24.info

What do you guys think? Can I improve something?

Furthermore I'd like to know how to promote such websites? I mean wouldn't it be hard to rank high in google for such a site with almost no content?

Currently I'm promoting it with facebook wall posts and twitter.. I'm getting like five new Leads daily..

Thanks for every response!!

My Bad.... i didn't see it carefully...
Sorry ....

mate.. please read carefully before you post things like that..

the right side of the picture is the "referals earnings which is always zero.." ... so.. LOL

you need good copyrighting skills. The header need to be more eye catching plus more convincing questions to generate a yes response in visitors

Here's what I saw - off the top of my head (I'm a copywriter).
*Your headline needs work.
*You talk about making $300 a day, but your "proof" picture only shows you made $300 two days tops.
* Your bullets aren't really bullets
* Your call to action needs work too

Your "bullet points" need more power:
Don't want to spoon-feed you but here's an example:

So you ?

? Don't Want To Suffer Hours In Front Of Your Computer?
? Hate To Waste Hard Cash On Expensive Internet Marketing Courses?
? Need To Earn Money Online Fast?
? Are Dying To Get Your Hands On A Step-By-Step Complete Money Making Blueprint?
? Insist On A Legal Money Making System?

You mixed up the bad and the good. When you do that always put the negatives first and let the list end with the positives.

By using words as Want, Suffer, Waste, etc. your adding "emotions" to the content that people can relate to.

Get rid of the Comments closed at the bottom. Gives the impression that you tolerate no feedback on your "story".

Just an idea for the headline (probably not the best):

"A 15-Year Old Kid Revealed Me His Technique That Makes Him $300 And More..... Every Single Day!!!

I was confident I was NOT going to share this but something changed my mind..."

Then of course you have to add some motives to the story that turned you into this "good sharing friend"

Maybe have a video?

The little text link down at the bottom - change the colour to something els so you can read it!

The big messy black marks that are blotting out some information should be redone and use precise black square boxes instead of spray painting it out. That way it looks cleaner and it's easier to read the earnings numbers. Those black marks draw attention away from things on the page. You could just "white" out instead as well.

Wow!
That's the reason why i love BHW!!

Thank you guys, I really appreciate your help

Will work on the page!

May I suggest you squeeze out a better page... sorry for the smart ass comment. Here is what I would work on if the site was mine.

- More eye catching graphics...
- More content is a must...
- Offer person something free for opt-in...

You're page is a huge eye sore. Make the graphics more appealing and that would increase it tenfold. Also more content. So same stuff as above basically.

Mjordan said:

You're page is a huge eye sore. Make the graphics more appealing and that would increase it tenfold. Also more content. So same stuff as above basically.

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actually your post has been written AFTER i have completely changed the page.. Before that I had no template and no graphics.. now I used this template which you can see now.. Thought that would be better as it seems more professional..

ok the content is poor.. I guess.. Allthough I've taken other squeeze pages as a sample and most of them have only bullets and the optin box.. but ok I'll work on it.

again thanks to everyone!!

I thought it looked pretty good, I almost got it myself. Maybe if it was $27 I would have lol.

Had a look at your new page today....looking much better.

And more important...you incorporated all the advice we gave you here...good for you.

A couple of points to (maybe) improve it a bit:

"I Use" is stronger than "I Am Using"

At Least $300.........Every Single Day!
The dots built tension by inserting a pause in the sentence.

Then Claim Your Free $300 E-Book Now!
Forget the "Then".
Without "Then" it's a stronger Call-To-Action.

"Just Enter Your E-Mail And Name And Your Free Copy"
Same goes for the word Just. Drop it and make the Call-To-Action stronger.

Your signature at the bottom isn't really a signature. It looks lost below that big optin form.
Look for one of those sites that gives you a free handwritten signature GIF.
I know they excist only can't recall one at the moment.
(maybe someone else can jump in and post the link(s)...)