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Please Review My Website's Copy

Discussion in 'Copywriting & Sales Persuasion' started by ueki94, Nov 18, 2016.

  1. ueki94

    ueki94 BANNED BANNED

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    The link:
    http://fuelgram.com/

    I'm developing an online platform which automates the growth of instagram accounts online.

    The copy is mostly finished, but I'm looking for some tips on how to make it better.
     
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    The text is a little on the thin side.

    On my monitor, there is a lot of text that appears in very long lines, as opposed to short paragraphs. Try to add some <br>'s now and again
     
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    Are you referring to the first first row after the header?
    We fixed it now, thanks!
     
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    I'm talking about this bit:

    Capture.JPG

    Also, check your inbox, I sent you a quick re-draft of the text, hope you like it :)
     
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    you need to have one grid for the hole content. you can check the screenshot to understand http://prntscr.com/d8yrxd
    it's hard to read the full screen text
     
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    Thanks a lot, my screen is kinda small and I couldn't see this.

    It should be fixed now, could you have a look?
     
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    Much better
     
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    You cannot ask any action before to let visitors know the main benefit. Please, work on your headline. Is the service yet working?
     
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    The service is not working yet, the landing page is only for the pre-launch marketing, and we haven't started promoting it yet.

    It's a paid service, but I'm not sure if I should mention pricing right now as the landing page is only for the pre-launch marketing.

    Can anyone recomend some sources to study?
     
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    I think that your post is kinda a promotion.....anyway it looks great now!
     
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    I like it. You should disable the loading screen, and also disable the jQuery roll effect on your content. Make your last three images smaller, and create a few more rows and add a bit more content.

    Add a few more pages to allow visitors to navigate the website too. But other than the fine tuneups, it'll work. Wish you best of luck:)
     
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    Enough has been said about the layout on the page, so I will suggest a few changes in the wording/content/copy

    • Your h2 is a bit weak (Needing a boost...). Be more specific about what benefit they will get. "Want more Instagram followers?", "Not getting the sales you expected through Instagram?" etc. (Just examples, you should spend more time on it)
    • "Register now and get early access to our platform" should just be "Register now for early access"
    • Under "Some of our benefits" you list features, not benefits. An example is daily reports. Daily reports are nice, but tell me instead how it will make my life easier. Maybe it will save me time because I do not need to manually check everything. Or maybe it will make me money because I can make quicker decisions on what I should stop doing. You get the idea...
    Unfortunately I do not currently have a time to look at everything, but you seem to have a great product so I am sure with a little bit of tweaking you will do well.

    Best of luck.
     
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    Looks good for me :)