Please Rate my COPY PASTE Editing skills

Hello Freinds,
I have started a blog 1 month back,
Started to writing post.
Now started to take material from other peoples blog.

please rate how i have edited it from the original post.
all types of review welcome

i am using free SMALLSEOTOOLS for plagiarism checker, but it is taking toooo much time. any other options


ORIGINAL POSTS

Nourish and moisturize hair with masks
How to grow hair: use hair masks

Hair masks should be used regularly, about a couple of times a week.

But if the ends are dry and split, then you can carry out an intensive recovery course and use the mask more often. How to choose a store-bought hair mask Choose a mask that says “nourish,” “moisturize,” or “restore” on the packaging.

Do not rely on products that promise "irresistible shine" and "incredible shine."

As for the composition, it should contain as many natural ingredients as possible, primarily oils.
Moreover, the order of listing on the label is very important.

If you see oil, but it is at the very end of the list, it means that there is a negligible amount of this component in the mask.

Apply the mask first to the ends, and then distribute along the length of the hair, stepping back about 10 cm from the roots. It is not worth rubbing the mask into the roots: they do not need such strong hydration.



EDITED POST


moisturise and nourish your hair with masks

How to grow hair: use hair masks

It is necessary to use hair masks a couple of time during a week. You should opt for an intensive recovery course if required and use the mask more often if you have dry hair and splits.

A mask that has the written “restore,” “moisturize,” “nourish,” on the packaging, should be preferred, when buying from a store

Words such as "irresistible shine" and "incredible shine." Are usually fake promises.

As for the composition, it should contain as many Organic ingredients as possible, oils being the most important. A very important point that everybody misses out is to check the ingredients in the way they are written.

Usually the last ingredient in the list is in negligible amount in the product, and if oil is at the last, then you should avoid it.

Apply the mask beginning from the end of the hair strands and gradually moving towards the scalp but stop much before the roots and the roots do not require such strong hydration, it is just not worth it

Did you use Grammarly too?

"It is necessary to use hair masks a couple of time during a week."

Should be: It is necessary to use hair masks a couple of times during the week.

OR It is necessary to use hair masks a couple of times a week.

No, i did not use that tool.
i will now.
apart from that, how is the editing from the original post...
Will it work.
Thank you for your advice

Anybody Else????

5 -6 out of 10

This probably not your fault, original content is crap.

Brilliant Digital Services said:

5 -6 out of 10

This probably not your fault, original content is crap.

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is ti good to be posted???

aspire.samee said:

Apply the mask first to the ends, and then distribute along the length of the hair, stepping back about 10 cm from the roots. It is not worth rubbing the mask into the roots: they do not need such strong hydration.

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Apply the mask beginning from the end of the hair strands and gradually moving towards the scalp but stop much before the roots and the roots do not require such strong hydration, it is just not worth it

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The original wasn’t Pulitzer winning by any means but the rewrite managed to make it worse.

Brilliant Digital Services said:

5 -6 out of 10

This probably not your fault, original content is crap.

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That’s generous.

aspire.samee said:

is ti good to be posted???

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Nope. I wouldn’t.

RushingWind said:

The original wasn’t Pulitzer winning by any means but the rewrite managed to make it worse.

That’s generous.

Nope. I wouldn’t.

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oh... Thank you..
ill try improving it.
any suggestions?????

aspire.samee said:

oh... Thank you..
ill try improving it.
any suggestions?????

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There’s two options I can think of :
1. You write better. This would be a long shot considering where you’re starting out and the time needed.
2. You hire someone else to do the rewrites for you.

Alternatively, you could also look into AI generated articles. Some of the samples I’ve seen have been promising.

I will add, before thinking about retrying this one. How about finding a better written original piece of writing and working from that.

If you are trying to learn and improve, starting off with crap to start with is generally going to result in even more crap.

RushingWind said:

The original wasn’t Pulitzer winning by any means but the rewrite managed to make it worse.

That’s generous.

Nope. I wouldn’t.

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Props to you for being honest, and also to @aspire.samee for trying to learn from his mistakes.
The only way to get better is by receiving honest feedback and working on improving what you've done wrong.

Trust me, the original article is horrible. You need an extraordinary & informative source to rewrite as a great article. Otherwise it's trash-in and trash-out. The source is stuffed with keywords, so there is little scope of rewriting. Here is another version to give you a hint (it's still pretty bad):

Nourish and moisturize your dry, damaged, and frizzy hair with a DIY homemade hair mask

You should regularly use hair masks to nourish and moisturize your hair. It's good enough to use them twice a week for regular hair. But if you have dry hair with split ends, you should consider an intensive recovery course.

The hair masks available in stores make exorbitant claims to provide "irresistible shine" and "incredible shine." They offer to “nourish,” “moisturize,” and “restore” your hair. You don't need to rely on them when you can create a hair mask at hom with natural ingredients that are proven to help.

The oils are primary ingredients in hair masks. But if the oils are listed at the end of the list of ingredients, then they are usually present in negligible amount. Start applying mask to the hair ends and then move towards the scalp. The hair roots don't need such a strong hydration so it's preferred to apply mask up to 10 cms from the roots.

RushingWind said:

There’s two options I can think of :
1. You write better. This would be a long shot considering where you’re starting out and the time needed.
2. You hire someone else to do the rewrites for you.

Alternatively, you could also look into AI generated articles. Some of the samples I’ve seen have been promising.

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Blackhat Lifter said:

Props to you for being honest, and also to @aspire.samee for trying to learn from his mistakes.
The only way to get better is by receiving honest feedback and working on improving what you've done wrong.

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Pavan Teja 1 said:

Trust me, the original article is horrible. You need an extraordinary & informative source to rewrite as a great article. Otherwise it's trash-in and trash-out. The source is stuffed with keywords, so there is little scope of rewriting. Here is another version to give you a hint (it's still pretty bad):

Nourish and moisturize your dry, damaged, and frizzy hair with a DIY homemade hair mask

You should regularly use hair masks to nourish and moisturize your hair. It's good enough to use them twice a week for regular hair. But if you have dry hair with split ends, you should consider an intensive recovery course.

The hair masks available in stores make exorbitant claims to provide "irresistible shine" and "incredible shine." They offer to “nourish,” “moisturize,” and “restore” your hair. You don't need to rely on them when you can create a hair mask at hom with natural ingredients that are proven to help.

The oils are primary ingredients in hair masks. But if the oils are listed at the end of the list of ingredients, then they are usually present in negligible amount. Start applying mask to the hair ends and then move towards the scalp. The hair roots don't need such a strong hydration so it's preferred to apply mask up to 10 cms from the roots.

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MisterF said:

Did you use Grammarly too?

"It is necessary to use hair masks a couple of time during a week."

Should be: It is necessary to use hair masks a couple of times during the week.

OR It is necessary to use hair masks a couple of times a week.

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Brilliant Digital Services said:

5 -6 out of 10

This probably not your fault, original content is crap.

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Special Thanks to everyone, as i see some big names of BHW giving their time and reviews.
i will definitely give 1 more try by myself and try use AI also.
Else hiring some1 would be the best option i guess.

aspire.samee said:

Special Thanks to everyone, as i see some big names of BHW giving their time and reviews.
i will definitely give 1 more try by myself and try use AI also.
Else hiring some1 would be the best option i guess.

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The thing is you're not native English, you don't pick up nuances, don't fully understand using contractions in sentences etc, so it's harder for you to write than it is, say for a native speaker. Grammarly will help a little with that and punctuation etc.

Nourish and moisturize hair with masks

How to grow hair: use hair masks


To maximize the health of your hair, you should use a hair mask about two to three times per week.

If dry and split ends are prevalent, applying a nourishing mask can help to replenish the loss of nutrients in the hair. It is important to note that masks with the words "moisturize" or "restore" on their packaging are ideal for this.

Be cautious when using products that promise irresistible shine and incredible shine. These are only marketing terms.

For the most part, the ingredients should comprise primarily of oils. This helps to achieve optimal hair-care results. It is important for the ingredients in your cosmetic products to be natural.

In addition, the order in which the ingredients are listed on the label is very important. The lower the ingredient on the list, the less of that ingredient exists.

If you see oil on the list, but it is at the very end of the list, it means that there is only a negligible amount of it in the mask.

Apply the mask first to the ends of your hair and then, as you work up towards your scalp, keep at least 10cm of space between the mask and roots. It is not worth applying it near the roots since they do not need such intense hydration.

Re-written by my AI

This is the type of post you would be better using an AI generator. It would handle this easily. It's a perfect article topic.

Like others have said, the original is pretty bad, and yours isn't much better. Maybe cause you used that as a template, or still need to keep practising your writing?

In general, Scrapping contents are protected by copyright, basic word swapping can lead to Google penalty.
You can either do creative translation that prevents duplicate content with foreign site or better use manual contents

leechesBleechin said:

Nourish and moisturize hair with masks

How to grow hair: use hair masks


To maximize the health of your hair, you should use a hair mask about two to three times per week.

If dry and split ends are prevalent, applying a nourishing mask can help to replenish the loss of nutrients in the hair. It is important to note that masks with the words "moisturize" or "restore" on their packaging are ideal for this.

Be cautious when using products that promise irresistible shine and incredible shine. These are only marketing terms.

For the most part, the ingredients should comprise primarily of oils. This helps to achieve optimal hair-care results. It is important for the ingredients in your cosmetic products to be natural.

In addition, the order in which the ingredients are listed on the label is very important. The lower the ingredient on the list, the less of that ingredient exists.

If you see oil on the list, but it is at the very end of the list, it means that there is only a negligible amount of it in the mask.

Apply the mask first to the ends of your hair and then, as you work up towards your scalp, keep at least 10cm of space between the mask and roots. It is not worth applying it near the roots since they do not need such intense hydration.

Re-written by my AI

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Wow, this is Wonderful. Which is it???

Panther28 said:

This is the type of post you would be better using an AI generator. It would handle this easily. It's a perfect article topic.

Like others have said, the original is pretty bad, and yours isn't much better. Maybe cause you used that as a template, or still need to keep practising your writing?

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I gues, I really have to go for AI or Hire some one.
I'll try conversion.ai and post something here, hope you all rate, how it has been done.

Rankster said:

In general, Scrapping contents are protected by copyright, basic word swapping can lead to Google penalty.
You can either do creative translation that prevents duplicate content with foreign site or better use manual contents

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But above everybody has just twisted the sentences, nothing else.
How to avoid it. Because in general all the topics will have the same keywords of the scrapped content, as the Topic is same.

aspire.samee said:

Wow, this is Wonderful. Which is it???

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Conversion (rebranding to jarvis now apparently lol)