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Please bash my landing page

Discussion in 'Pay Per View' started by toptoptop, Jun 12, 2012.

  1. toptoptop

    toptoptop BANNED BANNED

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    Hi guys, I want to hear your opinions about my landerhttp://www.blackhatworld.com/blackhat-seo/attachments/pay-per-view/13037d1339491296-please-bash-my-landing-page-screen.gif
     

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  2. lpe39

    lpe39 Regular Member

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    I don't like it at all. I mean I could design one that is 20x better. Get a refund, if you bought it.


    How to improve :
    Make it easier on the eyes
    Better Layout


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  3. Razvan

    Razvan Power Member

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    A sheet of toilet paper looks better!
     
  4. toptoptop

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    Well I'd like if you'll be more detailed about it, e.g. what you didn't like and how would you improve it.
     
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    I did, but do you want more?

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    I'm sorry, I haven't saw it, looks like you've edited your post after my reply :)
    No I did myself :)
    What would you suggest? will changing colors help out, e.g. would it be better to use white background+black text here?
    Also what can you say about the text, is it also crappy? Should I get off yellow background selection in the text or/and in top and bottem and use bold or something else?
     
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    On mobile phone had a few typos.

    Give me a minute to look over the text, but the layout needs colors easier to the eye. Something that won't make you or I strain the eyes.

    EDIT: Make the text flow a little more. ;-)


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  8. Swenne

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    You stole my reply lol
     
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    Why does it look like from 90's ? Drop it entirely and google free landing page templates or wordpress templates, there are tons of much better and free stuff on the internetz.
     
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    Great suggestion, I was just going to say that if the colors chosen were bad.

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    I always get such reply about 90s about my websites/LPs.
    My big problem is that I really like this one and in fact don't get why others find the colors bad, I know that I'm not representative here and I have to choose the design which my visitors, not me, will like. I'll try to find something.
    Sorry but I didn't get what should I do here, what it means :(
     
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    Maybe use a little transition words and use various types of sentences. (declarative, exclaimtory, interogitve, impartive)

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    Ok I'll work on the text later.
    So even if I change the colors to black text on white and remove yellow backgrounds it still will suck?
    Also note that it's a PPV landing so I'm sure it isn't good at all to put lots of graphics because it will slow down the page.
     
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    Sign up on a PTC site and have a look around for some ideas. The worse that could happen is that you make a few pennies while doing your research.
     
  16. toptoptop

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    http://www.blackhatworld.com/blackhat-seo/attachment.php?attachmentid=13046&d=1339510751​

    So here is my new "work", I've just copied the LP I found in google with few editions.
    Please comment it, is it better then the first?
     

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  17. HOmERCIdAL

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    Looks like a BSOD to me!.

    The second is better.
     
  18. gRaViJa

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    second one looks much better. But i wonder why the quality of the screenshot is so low. it looks like you use a 1024x768 desktop with windows 95? :p
     
  19. skittles

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    Bro just google sample of landing pages and get inspired!
     
  20. lpe39

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    Much better than the first

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