Please bash my landing page
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I don't like it at all. I mean I could design one that is 20x better. Get a refund, if you bought it.
How to improve :
Make it easier on the eyes
Better Layout
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How to improve :
Make it easier on the eyes
Better Layout
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I'm sorry, I haven't saw it, looks like you've edited your post after my reply
No I did myself
What would you suggest? will changing colors help out, e.g. would it be better to use white background+black text here?
Also what can you say about the text, is it also crappy? Should I get off yellow background selection in the text or/and in top and bottem and use bold or something else?
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I'm sorry, I haven't saw it, looks like you've edited your post after my reply
On mobile phone had a few typos.
Give me a minute to look over the text, but the layout needs colors easier to the eye. Something that won't make you or I strain the eyes.
EDIT: Make the text flow a little more. ;-)
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Swenne
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You stole my reply lol
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Great suggestion, I was just going to say that if the colors chosen were bad.
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I always get such reply about 90s about my websites/LPs.
My big problem is that I really like this one and in fact don't get why others find the colors bad, I know that I'm not representative here and I have to choose the design which my visitors, not me, will like. I'll try to find something.
Sorry but I didn't get what should I do here, what it means
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Sorry but I didn't get what should I do here, what it means
Maybe use a little transition words and use various types of sentences. (declarative, exclaimtory, interogitve, impartive)
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Ok I'll work on the text later.
So even if I change the colors to black text on white and remove yellow backgrounds it still will suck?
Also note that it's a PPV landing so I'm sure it isn't good at all to put lots of graphics because it will slow down the page.
So even if I change the colors to black text on white and remove yellow backgrounds it still will suck?
Also note that it's a PPV landing so I'm sure it isn't good at all to put lots of graphics because it will slow down the page.
Your example is basically a big block of text, I would not consider it a landing page. Google some of the tutorials out there on how to create a landing page. Here is a link that has some free templates.
http://www.graphicdesignmart.com/squeeze-page-templates/
http://www.graphicdesignmart.com/squeeze-page-templates/
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Sign up on a PTC site and have a look around for some ideas. The worse that could happen is that you make a few pennies while doing your research.
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So here is my new "work", I've just copied the LP I found in google with few editions.
Please comment it, is it better then the first?
Much better than the first
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