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[HELP] Could you give me some advice about this design

Discussion in 'Web Design' started by guixe, Oct 8, 2015.

  1. guixe

    guixe Registered Member

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    Hey guys, I've been trying to design a landing page for a non-profit and I just want to know your opinion. It's not finished yet but I'm sure you'll have some good suggestions.
    It's about orphan kids.

    Thank you in advance guys

    Note: Images have to be polished yet.

    EDIT: Here's the link from imgur with a better quality image. http://imgur.com/mkDEMRA



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  2. hekke

    hekke Senior Member

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    Looks good! Very clean which I think is good.

    Just one thing, "It's not late yet" to "It's not too late yet" as it sounds better. :)
     
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  3. guixe

    guixe Registered Member

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    Hekke, thank you for your suggestion. "Too" puts more emphasize, I'm going to correct it right now, thank you so much mate ;)
     
  4. johndefoe

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    The design is really nice! Well done! I love bright and clear sites like that.
    But, here are more grammar and spelling errors, friend :)
    it should be "these kids" not "this", and I think using children would be better, it's more formal
    it's "illusion", with two L and not two S :)
    "And if you want to take part in hosting program, we'll be glad to hear from you"
    I didn't check it all though, this is what I noticed :)
    Those are all minor mistakes, don't worry ;)
     
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  5. guixe

    guixe Registered Member

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    Thank you johndefoe, I'll correct those mistakes ;). Glad you like it!
     
  6. guixe

    guixe Registered Member

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    Another edit for you.

    Instead of: 'More than 170 million of kids have never felt the warm of a family'

    Put: 'More than 170 million children have never felt the warmth of a family'

    The design looks fine but I recommend you ask someone to proof read it for you.
     
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  8. guixe

    guixe Registered Member

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    Thank you Cross99, you won't believe it but I do. I think I'm going to kill some friends...
     
  9. josegustavo

    josegustavo Junior Member

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    Thread design was not much effective but your final design is really superb. I was about to suggest you to add some text in last section but in final design, you've already done it. In simple, I like the uniqueness of your design. Good effort, keep it up! :)