[HELP] Could you give me some advice about this design

guixe

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• Oct 8, 2015

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Hey guys, I've been trying to design a landing page for a non-profit and I just want to know your opinion. It's not finished yet but I'm sure you'll have some good suggestions.
It's about orphan kids.

Thank you in advance guys

Note: Images have to be polished yet.

EDIT: Here's the link from imgur with a better quality image. http://imgur.com/mkDEMRA

 

Last edited: Oct 8, 2015

hekke

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Looks good! Very clean which I think is good.

Just one thing, "It's not late yet" to "It's not too late yet" as it sounds better.

 

guixe

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Hekke, thank you for your suggestion. "Too" puts more emphasize, I'm going to correct it right now, thank you so much mate

 

johndefoe

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• Oct 12, 2015

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The design is really nice! Well done! I love bright and clear sites like that.
But, here are more grammar and spelling errors, friend
it should be "these kids" not "this", and I think using children would be better, it's more formal
it's "illusion", with two L and not two S
"And if you want to take part in hosting program, we'll be glad to hear from you"
I didn't check it all though, this is what I noticed
Those are all minor mistakes, don't worry

 

guixe

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Thank you johndefoe, I'll correct those mistakes . Glad you like it!

 

guixe

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This is the final design, just if you want to give it a check.

http://imgur.com/RiPw7ou

 

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Cross99

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• Oct 15, 2015

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Another edit for you.

Instead of: 'More than 170 million of kids have never felt the warm of a family'

Put: 'More than 170 million children have never felt the warmth of a family'

The design looks fine but I recommend you ask someone to proof read it for you.

 

guixe

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Thank you Cross99, you won't believe it but I do. I think I'm going to kill some friends...

 

josegustavo

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• Nov 11, 2015

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Thread design was not much effective but your final design is really superb. I was about to suggest you to add some text in last section but in final design, you've already done it. In simple, I like the uniqueness of your design. Good effort, keep it up!