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Feedback On My Sales Page Please

Discussion in 'Copywriting & Sales Persuasion' started by SysFailure0x5a, Sep 29, 2013.

  1. SysFailure0x5a

    SysFailure0x5a Junior Member

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    So I've been reading and watching videos over the past few weeks, but this is my first "real" sales page. I'd like some constructive criticism from the community. I'm pretty good with design and technical skills, but have never tried salescopy before. So far I'm not getting any sales despite some moderately decent traffic so I think I'm definitely doing something wrong.

    PM me if you're willing to help ;)

    Thanks!
     
  2. LaLore

    LaLore Regular Member

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    What is moderately decent traffic? Is your traffic targeted? I'll offer you constructive criticism. PM a link to your salespage.
     
  3. SysFailure0x5a

    SysFailure0x5a Junior Member

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    PM'd. Right now only about 100 a day or less, but it's essentially a brand new page. I'm still doing link building and off page seo and will try my first crack at some ads on bhw and maybe wf. I'm offering a "no credit card required free trial" but no one is even signing up for that at this point.

    I would call the traffic highly targeted.
     
  4. ookie

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    How tightly related is your ad copy to your page copy? What is your bounce rate?
     
  5. abhi007

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    pm me your sales page let me give my views...
     
  6. SirTimberWolf

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    I'll take a peek if you'd allow me. Writing sales copy is my job, so I may have a few ideas. :)