English help please...

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  1. trafficsource

    trafficsource Power Member

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    English is not my native language and I need to know which one is correct/better one:
    1) 3 bids for free at first loading ?
    2) 3 free bids at first loading ?

    thank you.
     
  2. blackhat123

    blackhat123 Newbie

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    first 3 bids are free for the first loading?
     
  3. trafficsource

    trafficsource Power Member

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    I will put this next to the log in box. The idea is for letting people think that when they register then they will get 3 free credits to play but after registering it says if load first time the credits then its 3 bonus credits....does it make any sense? :)
     
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    ambiguous expression
     
  5. LHaskins

    LHaskins Regular Member

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    Loading? What do you mean?

    Try:

    The first 3 bids are free!

    Or

    The first 3 bids are free for new members!

    Or

    Act Now! The first 3 bids are Free!

    Did that help?

    Then put, "Thank You, your account now has three bonus credits"
     
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    loading or downloading? whats a loading?
     
  7. trafficsource

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    loading means if buys the credits.
    I quess "Act Now! The first 3 bids are Free!" is good one or have any suggestion more?