Critique My Squeeze Page 2.0 - Thanks!

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Alright,

Got a critique on two other squeeze pages and taking that into accout I made another

Thread to see last 2
Code: 
http://www.blackhatworld.com/blackhat-seo/making-money/454051-critique-my-squeeze-page-version-1-2-what.html

So lets see if this simple one would do it for you guys.
Code: 
http://www.karsononline.com/freewpoptins/

Let me know what you think! Constructive criticism anything at all... I won't be offended.
 
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It looks nice. Maybe you can move that big play button to somewhere else where it doesn't block out the text.
 
It can look better.

The video is too wide, and those 2 dark corners near the video distract it from the words.

The play button should say "click here" or it should be smaller.

You should have some red arrows pointing to the email fill out, and the box should be bigger.

I should not have to scroll; everything should be condensed on 1 page.

Good luck!
 
Alright...

took the 2 dark corners out...
made video smaller
tried to condense into one page
changed the big play button

Now for your thoughts again!
Here is the new one
Code: 
http://www.karsononline.com/freewpoptins2/

Compared to the one up there listed originally
Code: 
http://www.karsononline.com/freewpoptins/[FONT=monospace][/FONT]


Thanks guys!
 
- Id say the header looks too bland and boring
- too much white space
- The background grey color should be darker to draw more attention to the actual sales page?
 
The email form is too easy to go unnoticed. People would probably clcik on the "Get Instant Access" button without entering email.
You either need to make that "Enter Your Best Email Below To ....." text bigger/brighter to let user know what they need to do, OR
Make a big red arrow pointing towards your email form.
 
The video font is too blurry.

You should still condense it, so that everything is above the fold, and no scrolling is required.

The email box needs to be much bigger; point some red arrows to it.
 
Okay... took everyone's suggestions into account.

Added Arrow, Tried to condense more, Made email box bigger.
Only thing I didn't do was unblur the video as I was told that creates more curiosity.

Check it out here and have at it again!
Code: 
http://www.karsononline.com/freewpoptins3/
 
In my opinion it's very standard and regular, the header is also not a very high quality image which disturbs the professional image of a website which you were going for.
 
Indeed I did have to change the look of the header image. I agree it looks pretty standard but that is what all the suggestions have led to thus far.

Hmm... I'll see what I can do about the header.

Throw me your idea of whats different that you would like to see!
 
Anyone else before I start sending traffic to these things? Thanks guys!
 
Hey, i liked version 3 too :)
Funny how sometimes most simple things are best...

Anyway, wanted to ask you, what plugin is used for New Offer top right corner ?
Sure could use something like that on one of my sites..

tnx in advance
 
This latest version looks much better from what I can remember of the last one.

I would get rid of the 'Search' box in the sidebar though, it serves no purpose.
 
Awesome. I am not that pro to tell you what to do now. But I am sure it will convert with the WF posts. Just delete the latest post and stuff on the right hand side.
 
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