Please review my sales page

[pjmc84]

I definitely think you need a testimonial from a woman for your women visitors. However, I think her boobs are a little bit too big for a testimonial image. It could turn potential women customers away for various reasons such as insecurity, etc.

For the men, if they are professional and intelligent, seeing boobs that big might instantly make them think, "Okay, all the testimonials on this page are fake, I doubt this product really works." I mean, we all know the boobs are fake, so why couldn't the testimonials be considered fake? LOL. This could go the same way for women though too.

These are only my opinions, but the best advice I can give you is to get inside of your visitor's mind. It might be hard from the start since you do not have any sales traffic going to the page yet, but make sure you track and analyze your stats meticulously. After a while you will be able to find trends in your traffic and in your visitors, and then you will be able to "learn" your general visitor and target them appropriately.

Good luck, and let us know if/when ClickBank approves it!

These are some great and very valid points Money, will seriously consider what you're saying.

I think I better remove the tits and put a female with slightly less silicon inside her, lol.

I've already configured google analytics and will be tracking everything daily.. thanks for the tips.

 

[cuteserra]

The title is really an ordinary one . So many sites have the same kinda lines.
You need something that is more exciting , more energetic and fast , that can make them haste to buy the book .

Also you should work on the background .

all the best

 

[RamChaturvedi]

I was just rolling down the page at a very fast speed and suddenly brakes applied to mouse!!!What i saw...a chick with huge and huge tits!!!

Is that photoshop or real??

 

[OldMadHatter]

interesting feedback you got.... curious how much traffic this little boob stunt brought in.
why don't you just make several landing pages (surprisingly some of the feedback here was high quality, kudos to your readers) and rotate them. then drive LOADS of traffic to them for a couple of weeks and benchmark those whitehat things.... bounce rate, time on page, redzones... old school stuff, but this makes the difference when you have only 1 chance to get that conversion

 

[pjmc84]

OldMadHatter: For sure, I am definitely going to be monitoring those stats.. thanks.

Ok I just changed up the background for the site (made it look more like a golf course)

Would anyone mind checking it out and giving me feedback? Changes to it, etc?

Thanks again!

 

[Money Man]

You might want to put "Master Your Putt" at the end of your title, instead of at the beginning. I do not have the time to get into my reasoning behind this suggestion but you can find all of my reasoning at the following link...

http://www.seobook.com/video-google-seo-friendly-page-titles

If this is helpful to anyone please hit the "Thanks" button.

 

[pjmc84]

You might want to put "Master Your Putt" at the end of your title, instead of at the beginning. I do not have the time to get into my reasoning behind this suggestion but you can find all of my reasoning at the following link...

http://www.seobook.com/video-google-seo-friendly-page-titles

If this is helpful to anyone please hit the "Thanks" button.

Point well taken Money.. I just changed up the title bar as per the video, thanks a lot!

 

[pjmc84]

Good news, my product was just approved..

It's now on the CB marketplace for all those interested.

thanks guys
Jim

 

[pjmc84]

I have some GREAT news to report.. the first affiliate sale is officially in! See below:

1 sale: 9 hops = 11% conversion rate, congrats to that affiliate! (Who shall not be named)

I will update with more conversion data when I have it. Cheers.

 

[Money Man]

Congratulations! Yes, please do keep us updated. This is a project that definitely is to my interest.

Thanks bud.

 

[Jcsarokin]

Congrats on your first sale. i saw the site when it had the chick with the huge tits, now she's gone lol.

 

[pjmc84]

Congrats on your first sale. i saw the site when it had the chick with the huge tits, now she's gone lol.

Thanks brother! LOL.. too many complaints man, I had to take her down.. she was stirring up too much trouble

I'll keep hitting you guys back with more conversion stats

 

[Money Man]

Anymore sales?

 

[pjmc84]

Anymore sales?

Hey Money Man, checkout my other thread.. the one that's more active. This thread was mainly used as a review for my sales page.

I've posted more conversion data pics here:

http://www.blackhatworld.com/blackhat-seo/clickbank/99615-sell-my-golf-putting-product.html

 

[Money Man]

Cool man, thanks!