Please review my sales page

[pjmc84]

I've just come out with a golf putting product called 'Master Your Putt' which is awaiting approval from Clickbank's review team. I think by Monday it should be approved and on the marketplace.

I was looking to see if anyone on here would be kind enough to have a look over my salespage and give me a quick review as well as any pointers / advice on how to optimize the page to increase conversions.

The sales page is up at : http://www.masteryourputt.com

I would appreciate your honest comments and feedback.

Thanks all!

 

[soulchief]

use better testimonial images imo... I mean, one of them is of a chick with huge breasts... how should someone take it seriously with images like that?

 

[shizaru]

Its ok.. I just don't like the font of the title.

 

[advocate]

The back image takes too long to load and it can be more professional.... and yes those boobs are HUGE !!!!!!

 

[ThisDream]

Choose another background image, it looks kinda lame. Other then that, it's ok.

 

[LVNeptune]

Uhm your testimonials have different names!

email says "Hi Jim" and the previous image testimonials name was Jim

Then the next email says "Hi Michael"

I would change the names around, I immediately close any page that isn't consistant.

 

[ThePost]

Why do all ebook sales pages use this infomercialy BUY NOW OR ELSE YOU'LL SUCK FOREVER style page? I know those pages make me sick with distrust to look at, and I guess buyers will be much newer to the internet, but seems like some sales pages should go for a cleaner classy, more trustworthy style. just imo

 

[spcldeal]

I think that your first line of "Finally Learn How To Put..." needs to stand out more from the subtext " 'Master Your Putt's..." I know the first part is underlined, but just doesn't work well IMHO. Maybe more bold.

Also, your putter bullet points under "Here's what you DON'T need to succeed:"
should utilize "DON'T" in the bullet points instead of "do NOT need" - again, IMHO.

I agree with the guy above, the chick with the huge knockers adds no cred.

 

[LVNeptune]

Why do all ebook sales pages use this infomercialy BUY NOW OR ELSE YOU'LL SUCK FOREVER style page? I know those pages make me sick with distrust to look at, and I guess buyers will be much newer to the internet, but seems like some sales pages should go for a cleaner classy, more trustworthy style. just imo

I think there's a template somewhere, I'd like to grab it myself

Honestly, I really think there is a template, either that or internet users are so noob they don't really pay attention to the layout of these ebook sites.

 

[illmill]

use better testimonial images imo... I mean, one of them is of a chick with huge breasts... how should someone take it seriously with images like that?

I especially liked the image of the chick with huge tits, but I'm a guy. Oh wait, so are most golfers. Maybe that's a good idea. Sex sales, even golf.
The only thing I would change is maybe put an 'add to cart' button more towards the top so they don't have to scroll all the way down if they're lazy.

 

[pjmc84]

I especially liked the image of the chick with huge tits, but I'm a guy. Oh wait, so are most golfers. Maybe that's a good idea. Sex sales, even golf.
The only thing I would change is maybe put an 'add to cart' button more towards the top so they don't have to scroll all the way down if they're lazy.

Thats exactly the idea I had in mind, I figured it would help b/c SEX sells.. simple fact. However on the otherhand if it hurts conversions due to credibility then I'll switch it up, but for now I'm going to leave it up there and see what happens.

I've made a few changes as per your guys' advice, so thanks for all the input. I'll continue to tweak the page and improve on it.

Thanks all

 

[55opotty]

Thats exactly the idea I had in mind, I figured it would help b/c SEX sells.. simple fact. However on the otherhand if it hurts conversions due to credibility then I'll switch it up, but for now I'm going to leave it up there and see what happens.

I've made a few changes as per your guys' advice, so thanks for all the input. I'll continue to tweak the page and improve on it.

Thanks all

I don't believe in that. Perhaps sex sells, but where talking about golfers here. They are mainly well educated people with money.
IMO, They are much more likely to buy a golf ebook from a website that inspires trust, than from a website with a pic of a girl with exagerated big boobs.

See hxxp://w3.golfswingguru.c0m/indexbr1.html and hxxp://w3.golfswingbook.c0m/
http://www.golfswingguru.com/

 

[Vivica]

Thats exactly the idea I had in mind, I figured it would help b/c SEX sells.. simple fact. However on the otherhand if it hurts conversions due to credibility then I'll switch it up, but for now I'm going to leave it up there and see what happens.

I've made a few changes as per your guys' advice, so thanks for all the input. I'll continue to tweak the page and improve on it.

Thanks all

Exactly, it engages the reader. You cannot miss those giant boobs and that makes people pay attention. Good move as far as I'm concerned...

 

[Opalinereverie]

I especially liked the image of the chick with huge tits, but I'm a guy. Oh wait, so are most golfers. Maybe that's a good idea. Sex sales, even golf.
The only thing I would change is maybe put an 'add to cart' button more towards the top so they don't have to scroll all the way down if they're lazy.

Sure, sex sells, but I'm starting to doubt that one could even stay standing with breasts that large...:lmao:

 

[LVNeptune]

Heh, holy crap! I just actually paid attention to the chick. Those are HUGE.

 

[orbit]

I like the boobs

 

[pjmc84]

rofl.. im so torn, 50% of people are telling me to keep big boob gofling chick on the page and the other 50% tell me it takes away from the page's credibility.. i never realized big titties could cause so much chatter.

I just hope clickbank approves the site today, thanks all again for your comments

 

[shadowfax]

I know why the boobs are huge ... she says so herself

I used to work with a golf trainer every morning and busted out .. :yield::yield::yield:

Now I envy the trainer


Ok back to the topic... I like the copy but the graphics need some improvement.. The background image should be different as others have already pointed out.. In the header image the "Master Your Putt" part could look more professional ... You can use different font for the main headline ..somehow it didn't catch my eye... One more thing.. The flow in your salesletter is not consistent, u can improve upon that


Hope that helps,

 

[Money Man]

I definitely think you need a testimonial from a woman for your women visitors. However, I think her boobs are a little bit too big for a testimonial image. It could turn potential women customers away for various reasons such as insecurity, etc.

For the men, if they are professional and intelligent, seeing boobs that big might instantly make them think, "Okay, all the testimonials on this page are fake, I doubt this product really works." I mean, we all know the boobs are fake, so why couldn't the testimonials be considered fake? LOL. This could go the same way for women though too.

These are only my opinions, but the best advice I can give you is to get inside of your visitor's mind. It might be hard from the start since you do not have any sales traffic going to the page yet, but make sure you track and analyze your stats meticulously. After a while you will be able to find trends in your traffic and in your visitors, and then you will be able to "learn" your general visitor and target them appropriately.

Good luck, and let us know if/when ClickBank approves it!

 

[pjmc84]

I know why the boobs are huge ... she says so herself

I used to work with a golf trainer every morning and busted out .. :yield::yield::yield:

Now I envy the trainer


Ok back to the topic... I like the copy but the graphics need some improvement.. The background image should be different as others have already pointed out.. In the header image the "Master Your Putt" part could look more professional ... You can use different font for the main headline ..somehow it didn't catch my eye... One more thing.. The flow in your salesletter is not consistent, u can improve upon that


Hope that helps,

Thanks for the tips shadow, I changed the header font.. check it out and tell me what you think.. or better yet can you suggest a better font to use? Im not very good with picking fonts.

As for the background image, i want something nature like to be there.. maybe ill make it look more like a golf course perhaps.

Will also read through the letter and try to improve on that, thanks.