Headlines! Which is Better?

[planck]

Hi Guys,

Just launched another product. Help me choose a headline!

It's in the cardiovascular health niche. It’s a “High Blood Pressure” product / “how to lower your blood pressure”

Checkout the URL - - -> See Headlines

 

[h4tcargo]

Not sure if this is a real thread or just some cheap advertise

 

[planck]

Not sure if this is a real thread or just some cheap advertise

You mean cheap advertisement.
One ought to read a statement before publishing it for public consumption.

 

[Visual Eagle]

You could have just made a poll and input those there so people would vote.. Not some link (I assume to your page).

 

[GringoMonkey]

The url is unfortunate. I see you are from france, so i dont know if you are aware of this but "quack" in medical terms means fraudulent doctors remedy in english.

https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Quackery

 

[planck]

You could have just made a poll and input those there so people would vote.. Not some link (I assume to your page).

Why a poll but not a link? What makes you think a poll will be a better means for me to achieve my objective?

The url is unfortunate. I see you are from france, so i dont know if you are aware of this but "quack" in medical terms means fraudulent doctors remedy in english.

https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Quackery

According to you, my geographical location gives you crystal-clear insight into my mastery of a given language. Also, in your opinion, I’m just some snake oil salesman.

At no point, have either of you given an opinion on the headline. If you want to give your opinion on which headline is better, you are welcomed. If not, “get a life!”

 

[GringoMonkey]

Wow... it is not my opinion, the meaning of the word "quack" in a medical context is "snake oil salesman" as you say.

You have chosen the domain name http://proquakker.com for a medical product and your worried about the headline?

 

[igcamman]

I prefer the 2nd one.
Discover How I Lowered the High Blood Pressure of my Husband and Helped him Totally Shed the Threat of Hypertension

But it feels more fluid reading like this.
Discover How I Lowered My Husbands High Blood Pressure & Totally Helped Him Shed The Threat Of Hypertension

 

[MomentumUK]

I'd go with:

Discover How I Lowered My Husbands High Blood Pressure & Totally Helped Him Shed The Threat Of Hypertension

 

[planck]

Wow... it is not my opinion, the meaning of the word "quack" in a medical context is "snake oil salesman" as you say.

You have chosen the domain name http://proquakker.com for a medical product and your worried about the headline?

Maybe, you have never heard of the Quakers.
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Quakers
That domain name was inspired by the Christian denomination "quakers"... not that i even owe you any explanation about anything.

Like I said... if you want to give your opinion about which headline is better; then, you are welcomed. If not, "please get a life!"

I prefer the 2nd one.
Discover How I Lowered the High Blood Pressure of my Husband and Helped him Totally Shed the Threat of Hypertension

But it feels more fluid reading like this.
Discover How I Lowered My Husbands High Blood Pressure & Totally Helped Him Shed The Threat Of Hypertension

Thanks for your positive contribution.
It is refreshing to see someone finally stick to the topic.

 

[DropshipDave]

for me neither of them. They are both too much of a mouthful.

Also what @GringoMonkey said is correct.

 

[igcamman]

Thanks for your positive contribution.
It is refreshing to see someone finally stick to the topic.

No problem, I had a similar issue when asking about re-directing a domain.

for me neither of them. They are both too much of a mouthful.

Also what @GringoMonkey said is correct.

I would also change the headline. But this guy just asked a simple question. 1 or 2.

 

[miniblicher]

But it feels more fluid reading like this.
Discover How I Lowered My Husbands High Blood Pressure & Totally Helped Him Shed The Threat Of Hypertension

This one is better.

But holy cow. That website :O It looks really messy, got my blood pressure to go up just by scrolling through.

 

[planck]

for me neither of them. They are both too much of a mouthful.

Also what @GringoMonkey said is correct.

How do you know I am engaged in quackery, if you have not used the product?

Who is a quack? Me or Purdue Pharma?
Am I at the root of the ongoing opioid crisis?

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[DropshipDave]

I am not saying you are engaged in quackery. However the domain would unintentionally give that impression to some people. Already two people replying to this thread have thought that.

It is nothing against you or your product.

 

[GringoMonkey]

@DropshipDave and i have simply pointed out another issue for you to consider.

You asked for feedback, and when you dont like it get quite aggressive.

Have you never heard of branding?

If you expect to be taken seriously you dont call a perfume store "eaudeshit.com", anymore than you should call a medical one http://proquakker.com/ people dont read it as quaker they read it as professional quack and that has connotations around your product.

 

[mzonas]

Maybe, you have never heard of the Quakers.
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Quakers
That domain name was inspired by the Christian denomination "quakers"... not that i even owe you any explanation about anything.

Like I said... if you want to give your opinion about which headline is better; then, you are welcomed. If not, "please get a life!"


Thanks for your positive contribution.
It is refreshing to see someone finally stick to the topic.

Wow your attitude is off-putting ... we don’t owe you to click on your link, read your headlines, suggest which is better ... it’s 1st if you really care ...

Also, poll is better as we can just vote and you’ll see which one gets more votes ... it’s easier for us to vote and leave than comment.

 

[planck]

Wow your attitude is off-putting ... we don’t owe you to click on your link, read your headlines, suggest which is better ... it’s 1st if you really care ...

Also, poll is better as we can just vote and you’ll see which one gets more votes ... it’s easier for us to vote and leave than comment.

When/where do I suggest that anyone owes me a click to my site?

I see where you are coming from concerning a poll. However, it is not simply the wording of the headline that is important. The presentation of the headline is also important.

I am not saying you are engaged in quackery. However the domain would unintentionally give that impression to some people. Already two people replying to this thread have thought that.

It is nothing against you or your product.

Thanks for the clarification.

@DropshipDave and i have simply pointed out another issue for you to consider.

You asked for feedback, and when you dont like it get quite aggressive.

Have you never heard of branding?

If you expect to be taken seriously you dont call a perfume store "eaudeshit.com", anymore than you should call a medical one http://proquakker.com/ people dont read it as quaker they read it as professional quack and that has connotations around your product.

I asked for opinions on the headline, not on my domain name. Anyway, your opinions on my domain name have been noted.
Have a nice day!

 

[Geasy]

Make sure to fix your margins. Your right side is wider than the left, if you haven't noticed. At least that's what it shows on my screen.

 

[GringoMonkey]

Fair enough as to your headlines.

You need to split it into a headline that grabs the attention and then a sub headline that expands on it providing more infornation.

As you specifically only want me to comment on the headline, an example would be truncate headline 2 to grab attention, so:

"Discover How I Lowered the High Blood Pressure of my Husband"

But a nicer way would be:

"Discover How I Lowered My Husbands High Blood Pressure"

Then write a sub headline expanding on that.