Notes on my landing page

[mr.y]

Hey everyone,

I made a landing page selling a course i made. I would love to get notes on it

https://goldpackages.trustbargain.com/?page_id=314

Thanks

 

[Leader777]

On mobile I give it 0/10 the button and the text look just crazy

 

[Deleted member 657006]

Hey everyone,

I made a landing page selling a course i made. I would love to get notes on it

https://goldpackages.trustbargain.com/?page_id=314

Thanks

have you even looked at your work on a mobile phone ?

i can not see it , but the words are huge to the page view lol.

 

[New to SEO]

The text is just too big

 

[mr.y]

Thank you very much for you notes. I implemented them. I would be happy to receive more notes

 

[neo91]

This is very ambitious but good for you - if you're selling a course on landing page creation, you better have the best landing page someone has ever seen.

The end result of your course is a landing page that converts, so if your page isn't AMAZING you're not going to sell anything.

A few typos:

• Are you tired of using landing pages that don’t convert? (missing "of")
  
• I have the perfect solution for you! Keep reading (Capitalize K, punctuation after reading?)
• This is a focused , Goal oriented course designed to teach you one thing- How to make high quality landing pages.
  • remove space between focused and comma, goal-oriented is hyphenated, space between "thing" and -

FAQ font is too large even on desktop.

Button text hover color is not appealing - too much going on with dark blue on dark button and text shadow.

Title of YouTube video should be Properly Capitalized and also be more descriptive of your course - it's another opportunity for a sales-y headline.

 

[mr.y]

This is very ambitious but good for you - if you're selling a course on landing page creation, you better have the best landing page someone has ever seen.

The end result of your course is a landing page that converts, so if your page isn't AMAZING you're not going to sell anything.

A few typos:

• Are you tired of using landing pages that don’t convert? (missing "of")
  
• I have the perfect solution for you! Keep reading (Capitalize K, punctuation after reading?)
• This is a focused , Goal oriented course designed to teach you one thing- How to make high quality landing pages.
  • remove space between focused and comma, goal-oriented is hyphenated, space between "thing" and -

FAQ font is too large even on desktop.

Button text hover color is not appealing - too much going on with dark blue on dark button and text shadow.

Title of YouTube video should be Properly Capitalized and also be more descriptive of your course - it's another opportunity for a sales-y headline.

Thank you very much

 

[AndreiDoesMarketing]

The lunching price is $11.47.
How will i receive the files after i purchase ?
and it’s approximate size is 2.6
Feel free to contact us in [email protected].
We recommend using wifi/wired internet connection to avoid unnecessary charges.

 

[mr.y]

The lunching price is $11.47.
How will i receive the files after i purchase ?
and it’s approximate size is 2.6
Feel free to contact us in [email protected].
We recommend using wifi/wired internet connection to avoid unnecessary charges.

Yea that is what is written there i didn't understand your comment so much

 

[AndreiDoesMarketing]

Yea that is what is written there i didn't understand your comment so much

launching
I make the purchase or after the purchase sounds better I guess and it's I not i
its not it's
contact us at
last one I just think it's funny

 

[mr.y]

launching
I make the purchase or after the purchase sounds better I guess and it's I not i
its not it's
contact us at
last one I just think it's funny

Thank you

 

[DropshipDave]

This landing page does not inspire me to sign up for your landing page creation course. Only looked on mobile but it's not good to look at I'm sorry.

 

[mr.y]

This landing page does not inspire me to sign up for your landing page creation course. Only looked on mobile but it's not good to look at I'm sorry.

This is an important reference thank you

 

[TelegramDominator]

Your accent gives away your origin

I recommend you to make a new video, this time with someone whose native language is English or at least someone who has no dominant accent.

In addition to what has already been said, you must hire a designer for your landing page.

In our language there is a phrase that is not translated into English so well , but you will understand the message.

The shoemaker's go barefoot.

And if I have to rephrase it to your situation right now, I would say that the shoemaker's customers walk barefoot.
And that's a hint of what you need to do, in order to be successful with your product.

 

[mr.y]

Your accent gives away your origin

I recommend you to make a new video, this time with someone whose native language is English or at least someone who has no dominant accent.

In addition to what has already been said, you must hire a designer for your landing page.

In our language there is a phrase that is not translated into English so well , but you will understand the message.

The shoemaker's go barefoot.

And if I have to rephrase it to your situation right now, I would say that the shoemaker's customers walk barefoot.
And that's a hint of what you need to do, in order to be successful with your product.

Thank you. Yes I understood that sentence. I think the process of learning from notes is important and I hope I can make my course better thanks to the lessons I learn.