Learn 2 Breakdance - Please Review My Sales Page

[pjmc84]

Hey Blackhatters,

Just launched my 6th Clickbank product entitled 'Learn-2-Breakdance'.

It's the first of it's kind on CB, and this niche is literally NOT being catered to at all.

Anyways, it's awaiting approval by Clickbank; so I thought I would get some feedback on it in the meantime.. I look forward to hearing your HONEST comments.. positive or negative.

The page is up at: http://www.learn-2-breakdance.com

Always appreciated, cheers

 

[jurums]

background image is too big.. takes a lot of time to load for me...
But it`s good

 

[therat]

so the term "how to breakdance" got 90,500 searches and no sponsored searches

"learn to breakdance" has 2 competitors but neither has a product dedicated to breakdancing

Since this was popular in the US about 20 years ago I bet there are certain countries where this is more popular

But since there is a good # of searches for these terms and no product dedicated to this niche, I like this idea.



According to Mike Filsaime these are the 7 Keys to a good LP:
KEY TO GOOD SALES COPY:
1. Good Headline 2. Use Bullet Points 3. Multiple Calls to Action 4. Sell with Emotion 5. Solid Guarantee 6. Signature 7. Testimonials

It looks like your missing a few of these but with your experience maybe you did this purposely

Anyway, its another good niche product in a realm where there is little to no competition. I like your biz model sir

 

[q3ick]

In my opinion its to LONG...

 

[Writer4Hire]

not bad at all..i agree with the background image issue.. rest is all good

 

[deadster]

Aaaaggghhhh my eyessss

 

[Therookie]

PRetty cool layout
Did you do it all yourself?

I used to do it you know in the 80s along with Turbo and Ozone
Hard to fathom I know
But the red writing at the top for mid 40s types eys starting to go needs to be blown up a bit largerHowever thinking on that its the younger crowd that would probably be OK with it.

P.S I might need some help with my sales copy when I get launched
I dont have testimonials or other stuff mentioned for good sales copy its pretty short and to the point

 

[oxonbeef]

I would love to break dance so i for one will be buying this just to embarrass my daughter. But back to the LP.
The graphics fit the era so they are ok just a bit bright for my eyes
but the first thing that struck me was "learn to breakdance" Damn! that means i've got to
do some work, I want to breakdance but I don't want to learn to breakdance if you get
what I mean. Nobody wants a drill they want a hole. So if the copy read
something like "Breakdance like a champion" rather than learn to breakdance
it would be more appealing. People don't buy features they buy benifits
So whenever you push a feature push a benifit strait after because you
want to get their wallet hand itching. Take sausages for example, They
don't advertise limp, pink bits of processed meat in a bit of skin, They
advertise brown, sizzling, fat, meaty sausages either in the pan or on
a plate with all the trimings, they push the end result. Good thing to
remember, "Sell the sizzle not the sausage"!

 

[Therookie]

Bro definitely go back and swap out the graffiti font with one that is a bit easier on the eyes - http://www.abstractfonts.com/category/23/Graffiti has a bunch of them. Also - i'd work on that header - maybe do something a little more advanced than red on red with a huge outline filter. red doesn't entice people to buy, by the way.

remember presentation is key.

Hey what are best colours (colors) for sales pages?

 

[JasonG]

limp, pink bits of processed meat in a bit of skin

lol thank you for that.

but that is a great token of advise... This reminds me of people who want to make money online thinking they dont have to work for it, but are wowed on a sales page when they see "become rich with ease!" it is then end goal they want NOW!

so de-emphasize the hard ass work they are going to have to put in to learn how to break dance, and emphasize the - "you are going to be a world class break dancer..."

 

[bu11d0g]

The graffiti text hurt the eyes (hard to read straight off) and it would have been better if the video showed doing a fast windmill as one off the usp's points out that the buyer will learn about and is one of the hardest breakdance move to master. Except for that i reckon it will do well.
Used to breakdance back in early 80's and cant stop watching JabbawockeeZ now.

 

[therat]

Hey what are best colours (colors) for sales pages?

It depends what your selling and that's why its important to Split Test multiple aspects of a sales page to find out what works best.

I can tell you that Red = Stop and tends to carry negative sub-conscious connotations

 

[gogetta]

Not a bad idea... However, krump dancing is becoming way more popular.

I'll promote your product and see how it goes.

 

[oxonbeef]

Hey what are best colours (colors) for sales pages?

I swear by colour association,
If I'm going to make a presentation it's white shirt, navy suite, black socks and shoes. Same with my
stationary, White expensive paper, embossed address. It's to convey truth and professionalism. My landing pages are the
same although I'm targeting a totally different market I dont want visitors
getting their attention diverted by flashy graphics I want them hypnotised
by the copy. Check out these and build your LP's accordingly.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Color_symbolism_and_psychology
http://getinternationalclients.com/the-impact-of-color-and-its-different-associations-in-multicultural-marketing/

 

[Therookie]

PEEPS

I think er hope you will review and criticize my sales page when I get my ebook out next few weeks hopefully.


Did you make and design the sales page yourself PJMC84?
Good luck with it
P.S I need to get a good affiliate page any suggestions a good one I can sort of copy?

Question! Is it wise to put other clickbank affiliate links in your ebooks or will that put affiliates off promoting it?
PEEPS What is the best pulling affiliate sales page on Clickbank?

 

[alex1]

I have a website with some info for people who want to learn TECKTONIK (aka electro dance). So I guess I may be interested in promoting your product on that site, once it is approved by CB. Feel free to shoot me PM once you are approved.

Here is my feedback on the sales page:

Maaan please please CHANGE that RED FONT on your sales page, it is totally unreadable and hurts the eye... Honestly... Please

Loved the video, the guys are skilled. Did not read the whole sales page (red very little in fact). Absolutely CANNOT read your headers (that red font with black outline is just must go IMHO)

 

[Deleted member 23846]

the aff normally dont buy the ebook tbh

PEEPS

I think er hope you will review and criticize my sales page when I get my ebook out next few weeks hopefully.


Did you make and design the sales page yourself PJMC84?
Good luck with it
P.S I need to get a good affiliate page any suggestions a good one I can sort of copy?

Question! Is it wise to put other clickbank affiliate links in your ebooks or will that put affiliates off promoting it?
PEEPS What is the best pulling affiliate sales page on Clickbank?