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Would love some feedback for the design of my future BST

Discussion in 'Graphic Design' started by nicdsgn, Jun 8, 2015.

  1. nicdsgn

    nicdsgn Jr. VIP Jr. VIP

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    I plan on launching a BST soon, maybe in a month or two. Just want to check what you guys think on it. It's not 100% finished but there's enough in it to check out.

    Here's the link to the full image:

    i.imgur.com/i0V8H3t.jpg
     
  2. SimpleSiteSolutions

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    It honestly looks better than most and it shows off your designs nicely. I actually really like it. A-

    A- because of some mistakes with grammar

    'Converting Designs Don't Have to Be Ugly'

    'In every project it does not matter how big or small it is'

    You need to fix these errors. I didn't read all of the text so there may be more. Other than the English mistakes it looks very good
     
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    Nice, simplistic, I dig it man. Good stuff! :)
     
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  4. jak19

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    needs to be a bit more exciting i guess, also you say he a lot when some of your clients may be female, also just re check all the english
     
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  5. nicdsgn

    nicdsgn Jr. VIP Jr. VIP

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    Thanks for all of the comments, that's what I'm looking for, especially those grammatical errors since English is not my native language. But this is not final I will have someone proof-read it when finished.

    The main goal for this is not be flashy in terms of design but just to showcase the designs nothing more since that is the most important part.
     
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    Good point with the male/female. Where you say "him" you should say "you". Where you say "the client" you should say "you". Where you say "he'll" you should say "you'll"

    This makes it sound like you're speaking directly to your customers and is very important

    Also, don't even make a suggestion that something is out of your league. You need you show a little more confidence

    The more I read the more I see wrong. I still think the design is very good but the writing needs to change. You might need to hire someone to write your paragraphs for you.
     
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  7. nicdsgn

    nicdsgn Jr. VIP Jr. VIP

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    Thanks a lot. I really appreciate it. I will have someone do it for me I just laid out the design first and the general idea for the content I want.
     
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  8. gb

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    Nice, overall it looks pretty solid and much better than others.

    Try adding a bit of color with a few call to actions.
     
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    nicdsgn Jr. VIP Jr. VIP

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    Thanks for the suggestion, I'll update it again when it's it's complete.
     
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    it looks great, I also make a website layout in my free time, definitely it's not good as you because i'm not a designer, but i'm also would like to get your option
    this is my site wallexthemes.com
     
  11. bigBozz

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    Just my first thoughts...

    I don't like the fonts used.
    It's missing a good call to action (why put it up if you don't want people to act on it).
    Reduce the image sizes, people will just think they're on a different website as they scroll down.
     
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