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Please Review My *Wordpress* Landing Page

Discussion in 'BlackHat Lounge' started by surajprakash31, May 19, 2009.

  1. surajprakash31

    surajprakash31 Regular Member

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    It took me a lot of hours to make this landing page on Wordpress...

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    http://www.wordpresscommentspammer.com
    Is it good?
    How can I increase my conversion rate?
    Can I add anything more to it which may increase the sales?

    All suggestions are welcomed.


    PS: I am not trying to promote my software here, it's already in the bst.
     
  2. DebbieSprules

    DebbieSprules Senior Member

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    I like it

    I have the following observations

    1/ There is too much text, surely you can use better ajectives and make the user click something sooner.

    2/ Do these types of pages "hard sell" type really work? I am not sure they do but if they do thats ok. tell me how much they are to have made and I will create some for my business.

    3/. You need to address the MAJOR concerns of the buyer asap in the text.

    IE -

    problem - solution
    problem - solution
    problem - solution
    problem - solution
    problem - solution
    problem - solution

    Then give the price early

    The less you can say the more it speaks for you...

    I can help you with some content if you get stuck, it pretty much blew me away too much text.. :)

    You could try 3

    1/ Wordy
    2/ Minimal
    3/ Beautiful artwork

    Careful on fonts, Try and use big nice grey 14 arial or tahoma.
     
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  3. DebbieSprules

    DebbieSprules Senior Member

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    Did you do this online with their creator or download the software and upload the made page to a server?
     
  4. surajprakash31

    surajprakash31 Regular Member

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    I made the page in Dreamweaver first and then integrated in Wordpress.
     
  5. eestisiin

    eestisiin Regular Member

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    I have some ideas, dont know if they will help or not...

    Anyways dont take my ideas for gold, since I never buy anything for those long salesletters, but people tend to like them, dont know why...

    What I would do is that keep the design, it looks good, but just make the website short, like Debbie here said - Problem solution, maybe some table format, keep the font smaller and try just to prove the system within two sentences...

    Cause whenever I see such page, i click back, cause I dont want to read this - "would you believe it, that your days of hard to find backlinks are through, finding unlimited super good PR112 backlinks with a touch of a button now just click here etc..."

    I want to know what is it and how does it work technically and why your system is better(especially when your selling it to other IMrs)...a shorter and straight to point text is way better for me...
     
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  6. richjerkoff

    richjerkoff Junior Member

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    I would get rid of this bit which is about the number of copies left...

    "Are we telling the truth? You'll never know! But that's not the point!"

    It's practically telling people you are lying which doesn't build trust.

    I would also have a lower price as it seems a little pricey to me.
     
  7. spikyy

    spikyy Junior Member

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    I hate those looooong sales letters, if you would like to give more information why not add more pages
     
  8. RandomName

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    Looks nice overall (in terms of layout) but here's a few suggestions (some already mentioned)

    1) too much text - wayyyyy too much to read
    2) too many users feedback that look the same in terms of number of lines etc - break them into the text a little if you want to use them (e.g. like this

    copy
    copy
    testimonial
    copy
    testimonial
    copy
    copy
    testiminial
    etc etc

    3) Try a different headline - after all, ppl looking to buy aren't looking for a wordpress commentor are they? They're looking for backlinks - well, really they're looking for increased ranking in the search engines - your headline doesn't show that

    4) I was going to comment on the rest of your copy, but to be honest - it's loooong! And I don't really have that much time ;)

    5) Why is there a hyperlink to voipcalls at the bottom - small thing I know, but be tidy!

    6) While you're there - change the text that says "copyright Your Blog" to the name of your site :D

    All in all it's a decent layout I think - FlexSqueeze if I'm not mistaken ;)

    On top of those, just test what works for your market

    RN
     
  9. wowhaxor

    wowhaxor Executive VIP Premium Member

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    Looks good to me except for one thing. When you are selling something like this your target audience is the BH webmaster which tends to mean that they hate those long sales letters that work well for stupid diet ebooks and whatnot. At least I hate them :)

    Looks really nice though.
     
  10. kelldog17

    kelldog17 Registered Member

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    people allready know about your software...a lot of them...so the only thing that "bothers" me is that there are a lot of testimonials...and stuff...keep it shorter...at least that is what i would do! thanks for the great software! :)
     
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  11. noeriddin

    noeriddin Regular Member

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    i agree with all of them..too much words..people dont like to read..
     
  12. aмillionaírе

    aмillionaírе Jr. VIP Jr. VIP Premium Member

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    This is a full-blow sales letter, is it really qualified to be called a landing page? Well this is my review :) - too much text, and there shouldn't be so much scrolling. I would created a condensed description of your product, and then create an actual lander ;)
     
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