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Need opinion on this ad I am posting for a local market

Discussion in 'White Hat SEO' started by fatjack'sblackhat, Sep 19, 2009.

  1. fatjack'sblackhat

    fatjack'sblackhat Jr. VIP Jr. VIP Premium Member

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    Did you know vitamin c in an individuals system makes that individual less prone to illnes including any type of flu, even the swine flu. If you eat organic food or feed your children organic food, studies show organic food to have an extremely higher amount of vitamin c compared to those pesticide produces you find in the grocery stores.
    Did you also know you can order organic food online and have it delivered to your door without having to pay a delivery charge? Yep its cool, but its only available to people living in the Collier and Lee county areas for now. If we support them, they can expand throughout all of SW florida

    (Please critic I don't care if your harsh, all of it helps, right?)
     
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    The spelling is awful, the language is awful... No idea who the target is... Here's a quick rewrite...

    Sorry :D
     
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    I totally agree man I think your way is a lot more persuasive. That gave me a whole new perspective on things. Back to the lair. muahahahahahah rofl
    *note: Its not hard or tough, its easy enough!.... Epic this is going to be my new sig quote lol
     
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    yeah your market is more educated and affluent. I saw your website in another thread. it looks great. i would leave out the, "yep its cool." and i wouldnt just target vit c. organic foods have higher total vitamins and minerals compared to mass produce. maybe do a comparison between the 2. where were you going to put the ad? to me, vit c hype is played out. I would focus on essential fatty acids. EPA/DHA in various fruits, veggies, and meats especially fish/fish oil. studies on essential fatty acids show they are so important to health. they lower cholesterol, reduce the risk of hypertension/heart disease/heart attack, reduce the risk of stroke, improve memory, help with depression, etc etc etc. Essential fatty acids (EFAs) are the hot nutrients right now with people realizing just how important they really are. after all, they are essential, meaning they are essential to life, if you go too long without them, you die. if you dont get enough your health suffers. and you can only get them from the foods you eat, your body cannot make them, hence essential.

    let me now if you have any other questions or need any help with this. ive been reading and researching nutrition for about 15 years. I know where to find tons of studies on EFAs. shoot me a PM if you want.