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I just shot a Rap Music Video. Tell me what you think.

Discussion in 'BlackHat Lounge' started by RedFaction2, May 17, 2010.

  1. RedFaction2

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    This is for Black Hat World

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bfn33rabm6U
     
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  2. RedFaction2

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    What do you guys think. I shot this just for blackhatworld.
     
  3. RedFaction2

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    Yes this is really me. Im making a new album
     
  4. RedFaction2

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    WHen i say rule book, im talking about blackhat
     
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    I really didnt see how it had anything to do with BHW. lol, are you just trying to get some views on it? I think you should make the lyrics related to marketing some how :).
     
  6. RedFaction2

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    no ones is tell me what they think, but that one guy
     
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    You want my honest opinion? prob not the best song to rap to...you completely butchered it.

    Try something dr.dre esque
     
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    Everyone has it's own taste.
    Knowing my taste, I like it.
     
  9. RedSEO

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    you could change the video composition more. or have more fotage.

    and ye, a beat with more "sound" to carry you would make you sound better :)

    thats constructive critisism, i think its cool what you do.

    the blackhat bit didnt come over very much though.
     
  10. RedFaction2

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    do you think i could go professional guys?
     
  11. ultimategamechain

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    just a feedback. I dont like the beat. try making a rap music like how akon do it. just my opinion.
     
  12. gb5000

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    Hey Red,

    For the video, not bad. Kinda like the editing thing you had going on.

    As far as your "rap", coming from a producer's perspective, the best thing about your song is the hook "I know", which is how it should be. Not bad, good job.

    You start to lose me as soon as you get into the verse. Your delivery is "slow", which is not a bad thing, esp. if gucci mane is doing the same thing and having success. But your "voice" is not captivating to me at all, It dosen't catch my attention at all, which is what you are gonna need to work on esp. if you are trying to get into this game of music.

    Overall, its 'demo-ish".

    If you want to be a professional rapper, STUDY the professionals and REALLY be truthful with yourself about how you are coming across.

    Would you sign yourself with a $500,000 advance with what you just did?

    Think about that! If thats your goal.

    Anyway, good luck to you!
     
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    Honestly, "delivery" wise - Average nothing special. what u wanna try doing is, changing the way u pronounce words every so often to give your delivery personality.

    Flow wise " seems like you have the fundamentals of staying inside the pocket of the beat however still nothing special, u might wanna try playing with your flow every 4 bars change it up be cautious not to make make it so random that it sounds terrible, also study the craft of writing, use different rhyme schemes

    Substance wise - Terrible " we hear the same topics everyday, i got money, I got girls, I'm a balller, I spent 10 years in prison that makes me hard etc etc, you need more creativity, you can talk about those things however it needs to be more creative for example Nas talked about guns but spoke about from 3rd person, so u can talk about these things heres a idea, if u wanna talk about girls...make a song talking about how a drug can have u addicted to it just like a female can, from a stand point of u spending awww yall money on this girl, she gets u so high off life u love her so much, but u really talking about a drug that's creativity.

    Can u make it pro, SURE! are u in it for the fame or the money, if u in it for the money just be a songwriter if it for the fame well get a few projects together hire a popular attorney who pitches projects to labels migh cost u 10k WHAM BAM
     
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    Its not bad, there were some good parts, but I think you should try a different song. Try a dre song as someone already said, I think it'd fit you better.
     
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  15. gb5000

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    Nice one Green. Just sent you a PM!

     
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    Mmmmm..... its decent man nothing crazy good
     
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    it was okay but it was hard to listen to the whole thing, maybe it was the beat or something. I like the second half of verse one when you switch the flow as that "smart" line.
     
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    Not feeling it... How you gonna let drake comin harder than you. Try to go in on the "Over" beat and upload it.
     
  19. chocolatemonkey

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    Keep going buddy, everyone has to start somewhere. :eek:

    I'm not putting you down or anything, but this guy graduated from my high school, so I guess you could say I'm used to extremely well done music videos...

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=re11giB4tbk


    Use it for inspiration man
     
  20. digitali16

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    Well we have produced a good bit of rap over the years and from the standpoint of another producer I thought it was pretty good. Yeah good enough to hear potential but not something to grab the ear of A&R for a deal mainly it is because now days guys at label dont have ears ( You have to spell it out for them ).

    1. OK honestly I got no problem with your voice: In rap some will like a voice some want but the trick is do everything you can with delivery using the voice you have. Now don't go crazy but spice up your Rhyme scheme and pour some unpredictable emotion into your rap.

    2. The beat: I can tell some work went into it and all and the beat was cut hot and pretty full but it just set there. I am an older producer and I remember when music was more than just a linear track. NO this is not envogue now and that is good for you. Take a listen to some older tunes and how the music tells a story with high and low points. Get your tracks to doing that. Enhance your delivery and then make the track work to enhance it some more. Make the track Point to and draw attention to your hook like the climax of a story.

    3. The hook was consistent and delivery was good but pick up the top 20 rap songs on Billboard and look at the hooks ( just way them out loud ) and then say your hook " and I know ". Does your hook grab you and compete with the other guys?

    First thing is getting a good catchy hook like buying the right domain name for the right niche it can put you a few steps ahead of the other guys at the very beginning. How does anyone on a blackhat board know if you can be a pro or not. That depends on you and how you work consistently and what breaks you can get. As demos go it was pretty good in my opinion so just think about some of the points above and keep working on an album. Maybe bring in a variety of producers to get a different sound because at first you dont know what will hit. Also DONT TRY to be another whoever because it is not that simple and you will chase that forever. Try to find your sound and then work it hard and build a market for it.