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Finally started IM please review my landing page

Discussion in 'BlackHat Lounge' started by whomi, Jun 9, 2009.

  1. whomi

    whomi Newbie

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    Hi All
    alter a long long time i Finally started IM i had some difficulties because i have a full time job and i am from india, so some time not abel to get US or other country traffics,

    i just started to learn and review my one product page,
    i tired to make it simple
    i can post that ling too but in don't want to recognized as a spammer in BHW or don't want to promote links
    so please check this image and give me your review about this page

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  2. saram1805

    saram1805 Newbie

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    The copy doesn't really make sense, and has errors on every sentence.

    Visually, it's good though. Intersperce the text with some calls to action, and resolve the issue where your video has 2/5 stars.
     
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  3. whomi

    whomi Newbie

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    ok thanks saram1805 any other review or suggestion.. from anyone please or any ideal demo page from that i can learn???