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ClickBank Sales Page Critique - How to Improve

Discussion in 'Clickbank' started by blackhataffiliate, Oct 25, 2009.

  1. blackhataffiliate

    blackhataffiliate Senior Member

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    I am getting ready to release my own ClickBank product and would like some feed back on my sales page content and what I could do to make it convert better. The ebook cover is coming, the price is in the works and I am okay with the design, I just need some help getting the sales copy down.

    All suggestions will be greatly appreciated.

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    http://www.adsenserevenueguide.c0m
     
  2. plateau

    plateau Regular Member

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    Just a short note. I haven't gone through the wordings but i think it needs more...
     
  3. bhayx

    bhayx Registered Member

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    something about "Take the plunge" at the end of your pitch is unsettling to me, perhaps you should re-word it.

    note* makes me feel like i'm jumping into something i'm not ready for.
     
  4. wdarpk

    wdarpk Junior Member

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    i have reviewd your sales page that is very uninteresting and needs serious re-writing. From my over a decade old copywriting experience, I suggest the following:
    1- You must add a header with an image of some attractive lady with money

    2- Re-write a powerful headline that grabd the attention of the visitor immediately.

    3- The opening paragraph must present the problem to the reader that most adsense publishers usually face and are on the look out to find a solution for.

    4- In the following Paragraphs you should describe how you can help them with higher CTR and how your system can help publsiher find high paying keywords and related content etc

    5- Use pointers to highlight the main features of your system and your sales language must be hypnotic and retentive.

    6- Use images from your adsense accounts as a proof of earning to make your sales letter more persuasive.

    In short this sales letter needs to be written from a scratch by a good copywriter who will add spice in the salescopy otherwise it will flop badly.
     
  5. blackhataffiliate

    blackhataffiliate Senior Member

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    Thanks for the comments and suggestions
     
  6. lazyfrog

    lazyfrog Junior Member

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    It looks short. Lacks images. There is no catchy lines.