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Can you rate my English writing ability please ? :)

Discussion in 'Black Hat SEO' started by loveghost003, May 27, 2013.

  1. loveghost003

    loveghost003 Regular Member

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    Hi, I'm not good enough in English and I want to write my website content with myself, so I use Google Translator with Spinnercheif and Plagiarisma-Detect to rewrite others articles to put them on my site.
    So here is a sample of my work to rewrite a paragraph from ArticleBase. Hope you rate my rewriting proccess on 5 marks.
    [This will be my website content so hope you give me a clear impression]

    Original Paragraph From ArticleBase:
    The top ways to gain weight for adding pounds of muscle fast to your skinny guy frame is to squat. For those of you who hate to squat or shy away from that kind of hard work, either get over it, or accept being skinny. Now, if you truly have a real reason for not squatting, then apply everything on this page to the deadlift instead

    My Rewriting Result:
    One of the best techniques to increase your weight and to enhance boosting muscles for those who suffer from the problem of being skinny is doing (Squat Technique). We have to mention that hating the
    technique of squat or feel ashamed of that method or even feeling that this technique is so tough, you have only two solutions, first is apply this technique even if it is tough, and second is to still suffering from this problem of being skinny forever. Also if you have a serious reason not to promote your ability to do the squat technique, then do all the work mentioned in this page instead of that technique.
     
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  2. MachineLord

    MachineLord Supreme Member

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    Dafuq did i just read
     
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  3. SkyrocketSEO

    SkyrocketSEO Jr. VIP Jr. VIP Premium Member

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    Please...outsource it
     
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  4. pathart

    pathart Senior Member

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    Id outsource
     
  5. loveghost003

    loveghost003 Regular Member

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    I just found some mistakes and corrected them :)
     
  6. steelballs

    steelballs BANNED BANNED

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    OP wait while I get that deciphered...

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  7. loveghost003

    loveghost003 Regular Member

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    I will never outsource it, because of low of bucks, but you mate may tell me some advises on how to enhance my writing ability.
     
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  9. mrorzio

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    Learn English...... Just Saying. Any Red Blooded American is going to forehead slap on that isht... Ridiculous.

    You should watch more American/english Tv --
    then listen to all the CD's about learning English as you can.
    Then travel to a native english language location...
    Then once you feel confident --
    In English
    Type in Google.com or
    google.com.uk
    Then you should search for
    Outsourcing articles and blog post.

    Dude - if you have low dollars, write something in your native tongue and make money there... then go after the other fish. You will fail and not make squa~doosh - another Southern American term for Cow Patty Fatties... or DookaDook...

    Get the program - Make money to eat...
    Then make money to raise the bar a bit...
    Then draw your business plan...
    Then start Scaling up.

    You have to start and you have to grow. Don't be afraid of hard work.
     
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  10. Goal Line Technology

    Goal Line Technology Senior Member

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    Especially Chuck Norris :)
     
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  11. Furious George

    Furious George Supreme Member Premium Member

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    Improve your english skills.

    Kind of a dumb question...... how do I do _____________ better?

    Practice, research, learn, repeat.
     
  12. carlikito

    carlikito Regular Member

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    Sorry, but your English is not good enough for content. Get a native speaker to do it right for you.

    Proper grammar is not enough, you need better punctuation and a better sentence structure. Oh and syntax too.
     
  13. ©h®Ϊѕ۞

    ©h®Ϊѕ۞ Newbie

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    Outsource your work, its the only way to get content, you're English is not good enough. There are ways to improve though so all is not lost!
     
  14. islandman1010

    islandman1010 Elite Member

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    The problem is that each of your posts and the actually rewritten article have mistakes in them. Generally when people spot even the small mistakes they would tend to go to another site. There arent huge mistakes in what you have written but its enough to know that English is not your first language.

    For example: I will never outsource it, because of low of bucks, but you mate may tell me some advises on how to enhance my writing ability.

    Should say: I will never outsource it as I dont have much money, but please give me some advice on how I can improve my English writing.

    Its a big difference to someone if their first language is English

    I think at the moment you would need to find some outsourcing.
     
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  15. SEO_Alchemy

    SEO_Alchemy Senior Member

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    Sorry bruv, I know you're trying, but no native English speaker (assuming this is your target audience) is going to read through that. You want to get better at writing in English? READ: books, news papers, magazines, web content, whatever, and lots of it. What ever "technique" with google translator and spinner chief you're using.... just isn't cutting it.

    And as above poster states, when someone is reading in their native tongue, even the slightest grammatical error, assuming they're educated that is :0, will stick out instantly. If the whole passage is full of errors, man they'll be gone in seconds, and never return. They might even

    Code:
    https://docs.google.com/forms/d/1rhRenrd16MDSgAOwnMVx9KQbp--0JoY9vKiJdIcMe44/viewform
    your ass.

    Just saying.....
     
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  16. Techxan

    Techxan Elite Member

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    I have to agree with the other posters, your English is not good enough for what you are trying to do. I do not see how you will be able to overcome this unless you immerse yourself in our culture. This problem is actually one that interpreters often face, they must immerse themselves in the culture they are translating to in order to stay current on idioms, vernacular, and grammar in order to nail the nuance.

    You said:

    We would say something like this.

    all the rest of that statement is not how we would talk.

    You said:

    This entire statement is useless. At best if you wanted to include it, you would say something like:

    You said:

    Where we might say:

    As it stands now, you simply cannot write for an American audience. If you cannot afford content, you will be wasting your time and money.

    And for the record, very few people in the US have a problem with being skinny. Quite the contrary.
     
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  17. lshiun

    lshiun Junior Member

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    I would use it on tier one or tier two, sorry.
     
  18. gordop

    gordop Registered Member

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    if you really want to learn English, get Rosetta Stone it's actually pretty good. It will help you learn basic sentence structure and expressions. If you will be writing for an American audience, get the U.S. version and not the British one.
     
  19. dragonrage01

    dragonrage01 Power Member

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    You can use it for a money site.
    Just stick to promoting affiliate products or made for adsense websites that are 5 pages or so.
    Go away from giving valuable information and stick to praising the products and such.
     
  20. Ricky Roma

    Ricky Roma Regular Member

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    You tend to over complicate your sentences. Make them simpler and shorter likeTechxan did.