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Can you rate my article please? NOT NATIVE ENGLISH SPEAKER SEEKS TO WRITE HIS CONTENT!

Discussion in 'Making Money' started by loveghost003, Aug 14, 2014.

  1. loveghost003

    loveghost003 Regular Member

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    Hi guys I want to write my website content and I'm not native English speaker/writer but I'm working on developing my writing abilities.
    This is not my first thread to ask you guys to rate my writing ability but this time I spend much more time learning a lot about English.

    THE ORIGINAL ARTICLE:
    http://www.imaging-resource.com/PRODS/E5D2/E5D2A.HTM

    MY ARTICLE:
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    Thank You :)
     
  2. mootonandy

    mootonandy Supreme Member

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    Its not perfect but its more than good enough.
     
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  3. CazuaL

    CazuaL Jr. VIP Jr. VIP Premium Member

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    Keyword density should be around 1-2%. You have it at the start of every sentence.

    Quite a few spelling/grammar mistakes but it's far from unreadable.
    Keep practicing and take a look at some examples online.
     
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  4. lietuvis002

    lietuvis002 BANNED BANNED

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    yea, it's pretty good man. i'd pay $1.5-2 for dat. only for =<tier2 content
     
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  5. Selena1

    Selena1 Registered Member

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    I'm sorry if I come across as harsh, but your article looks a bit like the spinned stuff you can read online.
    It was already said above; your keyword density is off the charts.
    Also, there is barely any punctuation in the article. It's pretty tedious to read because of that.

    I think the content itself has potential, but yeah, there are still several grammatical & spelling mistakes.
    Did you proofread your article?
     
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  6. LostConnection

    LostConnection Senior Member

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    Umm... What's with the keyword density? You don't need to stuff it every where, and you shouldn't. It also looks a bit odd.

    Otherwise, good for a start or a Tier 2 site, but keep practicing to get it just right for the money sites.
     
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  7. loveghost003

    loveghost003 Regular Member

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    Thank you guys, I appreciate your response.

    Yeah, Microsoft Word 2010 Proofreading tool.