Can anyone review my email sales letter?

Discussion in 'Offline Marketing' started by Elmo*, Jan 30, 2012.

  1. Jan 30, 2012
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    Elmo*

    Elmo* Junior Member

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    This is the first time I created a sales letter. I hope you guys can give me some tips on improving it :)

    I'm using this email for cold-calling, but I'm not really comfortable to disclose it publicly.

    PM me your email and I will send you the sales letter (I cannot PM yet), thanks in advance!!
     
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    southbayboredom

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    Just post it in the thread. :)
     
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    ardley216

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    Post it here, I'll help you
     
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    imperial109

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    Post it here so everyone can rip it :D

    If this is your first time doing this, just copy one made by an expert in the field. Just change the words around a bit to convey your product.
     
  5. Jan 31, 2012
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    Balthazshar

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    POst it here. You wont get a better opportunity to have it ripped apart - which is exactly what you want. Battle-tested, field experienced veterans picking it apart. You are better off doing that, then doing a mailing and get zero response or worse yet, negative response.
     
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    Design Superstars

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    I'd be happy to help!
     
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    nojrellum

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    Let's see it!
     
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    Dumper

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    Don't be shy about it man, we can't help you if we can't see it and we won't RIP you/it too awful bad :D
     
  9. Feb 6, 2012
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    poweronics

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    I would like to review it. Use skype for contacting if pm is not possible. Simple as that !!!