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Anyone know where I can get some help with my landing page?

Discussion in 'Copywriting & Sales Persuasion' started by wallofiron, Sep 14, 2014.

  1. wallofiron

    wallofiron Power Member

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    Trying to find someone to hire to redo my landing page for our dietary supplement website. I have tried hiring people from fiverr, elance, odesk, freelancer, 99designs... and sure some graphics were good but copy just sucked.

    From everything I have been told the landing page is too long and the copy sucks. However I am not sure what to cut out or what to try out copy wise. Anyone that I have hired has just wrote shitty ass copy that was worse than my own.

    Any ideas or feedback on the website is greatly appreciated or if you have any recommendations on someone that could help us with our landing page in any way.

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    Been selling a dietary supplement online for the lat 5 months because I saw a need in a specific niche. I have been selling B2B 100x better than I sell direct to consumer. People have contacted me saying how excited they are about the product but nobody opens their wallet. People emailing saying "thank you so much for inventing this product"... even a well known activist in the niche has praised our product.

    Other vendors who sell my product convert at about 2-3% consistently. For some reason my traffic converts at .23% and getting worse no matter what I do or how targeted my traffic.

    I have played around with price, split tested up the wazoo, social media, landing pages, shopping carts, buttons, offers, traffic sources, etc. Doesnt matter my product does not convert on my own website. I had to open an affiliate program out of all the requests I was getting from various websites to do so but soon after they start promoting our product they end up leaving as again, no conversions. They are all excited about the idea beg me to let them promote the product but no sales. Obviously the problem is on my end but for the life of me I cant figure it out.

    Any suggestions on why my b2c efforts do not convert? Please help as I sincerely appreciate your thoughts.

    Our website is here: http://bit.ly/1qxNw29

    most often linked to landing page: http://bit.ly/1fQiX3t
     
  2. sjoerdtop

    sjoerdtop Regular Member

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    i could improve your site but i'm going to have to do some research on the niche first for the best result.

    and would you like a normal wordpress site or a more advanced html website?
     
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  3. wallofiron

    wallofiron Power Member

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    We wanted to keep the wordpress site for now and just redo the landing page... using the theme we have now I can make a blank header page very easily if necessary.
     
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    From a webmaster, webdesigner and a general visitor viewpoint, here are my thoughs after the first impression. I've to add that I also promoted products like phen375 and few more from markethealth in the past so I have some experience about which kinda landing page converts best.

    Your landing page takes years to load on my 8Mbps connection.
    The images are scaled to fit but very poorly optimized.
    There are tons of images on your page (4.3 MB)
    Your landing page size is 4.8 MB!
    An image is not loading in the landing page.
    [​IMG]
    Turns out you sourced it from another domain which is suspended now.(http://www.labnatural.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/08/envio-home-bottle.png)

    All the different colors and font sizes on your page simply distracts me and reminds me about all the childhood memories from Disney World. I dont even recognize the buy now button. You basically put an ad copy,sales copy and a carbon copy all in a single landing page.

    Your design looks like an WSO and so 2005ish. That is not how you have a landing page in 2014. We're in a fast paced world. People want everything fast. They dont like to sit and read a chapter from harry potter on your landing page. Forget about those long ar*e sales copies and make it short and simple and clean. If you want to get out the message to the visitors, Let a quick 30 sec informational video do it for you.

    I'd completely redo the landing page in 3 different versions(for split-testing) with a video and short sales copy.
     
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  5. sjoerdtop

    sjoerdtop Regular Member

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    if you could give me a look at how the wordpress theme fuctions i could make it look a whole lot better for a good price.
     
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  6. wallofiron

    wallofiron Power Member

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    this is the theme I am using...


    http://flatsome.uxthemes.com/
     
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    OP, hit up the user koolkake, he is pretty strong when it comes to making landing pages.
     
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  8. wallofiron

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    agreed 100% with everything you said... the broken linked image I was actually in the process of correcting. That labnatural was also my website when I tried different versions of landing pages but I never transferred over that particular image.

    I actually had a VSL landing page and that was the worst performer of everything I have tried.

    here is the video that I had integrated into the website

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xbE34weJBzk
     
  9. sjoerdtop

    sjoerdtop Regular Member

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    i'm not seeing an imagine
     
  10. wallofiron

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    i could work with that.

    you can contact me on skype: sjoerdtoppi and i can show you some of my work.

    like i said my prices are very good so i'm sure we can work out a deal.
     
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