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About to release A clickbank product - Sales Copy Review

Discussion in 'Clickbank' started by advancedfuture, Nov 24, 2009.

  1. advancedfuture

    advancedfuture Junior Member

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    I am getting ready to release my own ClickBank product and would like some feed back on my sales page content and what I could do to make it convert better. Been working on this DVD for over a year, and finally got it done, the video clips on the main page are just placeholders until I get the clips back edited and formatted for the page. It's going to be a digital download.

    All suggestions will be greatly appreciated. I'm not that great at sales copy writing, so any critiques on what I can do to make this thing REALLY pop will be great, I'm going to offer a 75% payout on this.

    Code:
    www.detailingpros.inf0
     
  2. jmm223

    jmm223 Registered Member

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    The main problem I have is that you keep calling it a DVD, yet it is a download.
    I think the cinsumer will be confused by this and wonder why they are not getting a physical DVD.
     
  3. JackSparrow

    JackSparrow Supreme Member

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    Yes i agree say DVD download just in that first paragraph so customers have that in their mind and say the download size somewhere on the page, as for the sales copy and videos i say its a pretty good effort, the testing is in the sales conversions before you can really see how good it all is.

    Id like to put a review of this on my website, if you could write a page worth of review text from the point of view who has bought the product for me i will put it on my review blog and drive some ppc towards it and see if anybody bites.
     
  4. agente808

    agente808 Regular Member

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    You have some basic typo errors which are going to hurt you:
    "If your wash your car..."

    Hire a professional writer to proofread and improve the copy - they are not expensive and it will make a big difference!

    Also, on the main body area, you need some padding around the main content - it's butting up against the edges - looks unprofessional

    Instead of DVD (or eDVD - wtf?) just call it a video - be consistant - although, since you mentioned it - an option to purchase the video on DVD as an upsell is a great idea!
    (you can use a one-off DVD production service, see example below)
    Code:
    http://kunaki.com
    
    otherwise looks great, I'm sure you'll do well!
     
  5. advancedfuture

    advancedfuture Junior Member

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    thanks for the feedback everyone, I've made some additional formatting changes, corrected a few spelling and grammatical errors. I have a couple other great idea's that are not being promoted on click bank at the moment that I think can take off. One that's very big compared to this, and very niche!
     
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    kryseo Regular Member

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    If you are selling your own product, it is best if you can change the .info domain and use a .com instead. More professional and less spammy.
     
  7. virus_1720

    virus_1720 Jr. VIP Jr. VIP Premium Member

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    the sales page is too short and for god's sake buy a dot com. You will lose money if you don't
     
  8. London Money Maker

    London Money Maker Newbie

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    dude

    one question whats the market size for this?
     
  9. Gupnup

    Gupnup Regular Member

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    Lots of spelling errors.
     
  10. beazt

    beazt Power Member

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    I agree with Virus_1720, the sales page is a touch too short. Content quality can also be better.
     
  11. theconfidenceman

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    the sales copy does not have me excited to buy your book. it looks as if you are giving generic info that could be found on the back of a can of car wax.

    keep in mind, most folks dont want to learn how to detail; they want to learn how to remove scratches, make a dull paint job look like new, remove gum and tar from the paint, get rid of bird crap, remove gum from paint or rugs, remove cigarette smell from interior, remove dings without body work etc.

    heres a tip; tell them youll show them how to get $1,000 pro detailing tools for FREE
    (buy it at home depo and return it when youre done! ha)

    and if you present it as secret info the body shops and dealers dont want you to know, along with before and afters, will add some appeal to your current copy.
     
  12. blackjack

    blackjack Regular Member

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    1. Get .COM domain name
     
  13. av8sean

    av8sean Newbie

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    I'd lower the price to like $2.99. Detailing a car is not rocket science.
     
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    affiliate_onlinebiz Junior Member

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    Also think about having an upsell process in place when you go live. Otherwise you could be losing lots of money.
     
  15. wildcherry

    wildcherry Newbie

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    Don't be a douche - this guy worked hard to put together an informational piece for which there is a large market - people will pay to get all of their info in one place, rather than scouring the internet to find how to do this and how to do that. And a professional quality detailing takes skill - not just sweeping and wiping.

    OP, keep testing, I'm sure you have a winner here.