Please rate?suggest something for my sales letter

ludovic115 · #1 (**permalink**) 09-07-2008, 03:08 PM

Click Here to view my sales letter. Any comment is not offended by me, i rather hear the truth, and real suggestion what i should, to boost more marketing power.
Thank you

**PauloPT** · #2 (**permalink**) 09-07-2008, 03:22 PM

QUICK REVIEW

- I can't pratically read the sub-headline in the orange background.

- You have different colours for testimonials. You should have only one, usually light yellow. Some of the coulours you're currently using make the text un-readable.

- Maybe get a better image for this:

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- "From: Dean: Ludovic Louisdhon
Thursday 10:37 PM" >> have a js function so it says X day - X hour

* I know the image doesn't look bad, but on the website it does, it looks like it's badly cutout because it's on a white background.

ludovic115 · #3 (**permalink**) 09-07-2008, 03:28 PM

ok thank you very much, but hows the sales letter it

bako123 · #4 (**permalink**) 09-07-2008, 03:31 PM

might want to take out the one line review in the middle of what products u have for sale
add them with a thing saying

Member testimonials

AUTOATTACKER · #5 (**permalink**) 09-08-2008, 09:19 AM

You have a great proposition my friend for e-books junkies out there. But please do remember that most people are not fond of browsing through site having a kilometric sales pitch.

**justthinking** · #6 (**permalink**) 09-08-2008, 09:31 AM

I don't care too much for the background image. How about just a color?