Cat got your tongue?
Why don't you at least hire someone on fiver to voice over the sales copy? There are really talented people out there and you can hire one of them for around 20 bucks to voice over it for you.
Also I suggest you change the headline. "Fastest time possible" is kind of vague. Is it five days? Is it 5 weeks or what? MMO players don't want to waste time grinding or leveling up. They are looking for the short cut.
For instance, instead of saying "
Reach level 50 in the fastest time possible" you could say "
Discover This Dirty Little Short Cut That Will Get You To Level 50 In Less Than 96 Hours".
Now when the visitors land on the page, just by reading your headline they will right of the bat know that if they buy your guide, they can reach the level cap in less than 96 hours. This is how you hook them and make them to read more. Headline is one of the most important parts of a sales copy and you should take advantage of it.
Another thing I noticed is all the negative crap at the bottom of the page. You should talk about
why they should buy your product.
NOT why they shouldn't buy it lol. I know you tried to be sarcastic but it doesn't work that way. You should always talk about the positive aspects of it. If they don't buy then it's their loss, but there's a better way of saying that. Visitors are already on the fence, so don't pull them back.
For instance, you could just reword this and make it a positive statement:
Why You Should Take Advantage Of My Guide? (Avoid the word "buy")
* Using cheats, hacks will eventually get you banned.
* Instead of spending hundreds of hours struggling with quests and grinding, you could be enjoying the end game content in less than 96 hours!
* Once you start using my guide, you will never have to pay for expensive leveling services, ever. Use the force is a well laid out, step by step leveling guide that is compatible with all the classes in the game!
* Drop this one out and find a better benefit. Because no matter how good your guide is, talking bad about others does not leave a good impression.
* Discover all the in game content and destroy your foes in pvp with the coolest in game weapons and gear.
* Make your nick name a legend. The guilds will literally beg you to have you as a member and your opponents will think twice to challenge you in Pvp ( If there's a guild system. Never played swtor).
* Never struggle financially. You will always have plenty of gold (or whatever the currency is) to buy whatever you want, whenever you want.
These are some of the examples that i could think of. Don't forget that most mmo players are teenagers and all they want is to reach the level cap as fast as they can and having the best in game weapon/gear set for pvp.
P.S: You should avoid using the
"buy" word as much as you can. Instead of order now, you could say
"Make me level 50 Now!" etc. You should push their emotional buttons as much as you can to increase your conversion rate.
Good luck.
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Originally Posted by infogeek
Would love to play this to at least get the ins and outs of the game so I would promote it better.
but I haven't put through that much traffic yet only around 10-20 order form impressions.
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