http://freexboxlivecode.net/text-squ...1-12-18-012346

Here it is!

Could do with a few tweaks:

- join form needs to be much larger and brighter, make the text bigger and bolder or something
- instead of the js alert over the "Click HERE for your FREE REPORT", link it to a named anchor that scrolls to the join form
- break up that huge chunk of text in paragraphs or even better smaller bullet points, put it in smaller font so you don't scroll down past the join form to read it
- you need more sales copy to make me want to sign up on the initial javascript overlay

edit the footer... add disclaimer.. take off the profits theme verbage... nice lookn squeeze.... what pop up plugin are you using?

Originally Posted by drewman

what pop up plugin are you using?

From a quick skim of the source, it looks like Thickbox. However I think Fancybox is better, more features, excellent documentation and it is currently maintained.

copy will be added, also to the lightbox

well, this wasent about the copy i said "layout" but thx anyways.

the reason i had the big chunk of text in there, was basicly to presell the product, in the text it gives some few tips, and gives the user some questions, and then the text suggest that the user can signup to get these questions answered. That was basicly the theory behind the big chunk of text. Also, why make the signup bigger? if people read the text and like it they should be able to find it themselves, or they will click the "free report" button and that will tell them how to do it? excuse me if i am wrong i usually outsource my copywriting.

No one's going to read all that text, especially one big chunk of it like that. That's why paragraphs were invented.

Also that huge chunk is fucking up the layout because it makes the surfer scroll down past the join form. On a squeeze page, the surfer's eye movement and scrolling has to bring them to the join form no matter what they do.

I would combine your bullet points and your text paragraph. Have the main bullet points in a big / bold font (like subheadings) and a sentence or two of supporting info underneath each one. That should shorten the page a bit and keep your join form where it is supposed to be in relation to your copy.

All your copy should be doing is getting the surfer to signup for your report. You're not preselling the Truth About Abs - you're selling your free report, so your copy should reflect why they should sign up for your report. That copy is also waaaay too long for a squeeze page and needs a serious trim.

I get that thx alot for the advice. Normally i outsource these kind of tasks. But i will Give it a shot

delete that footer "powered by bla bla bla", that would help a bit